Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is indeed undeniable that being aware of events happening around the world plays a significant role in almost every aspect of our lives. Although it is improbable that some events will affect people's daily life, being aware of them will increase their general knowledge. People often divided by the idea either it is crucial to know about world's events or not. Regarding this controversial issue, I believe it is important to be aware of all events.
On this account, these days we are observing a lot of disasters in the world. By being aware of these phenomena, people will try to have contributions in disastrous areas. For instance, when an earthquake happens in a country, people from all over the world try to help them. They send them clothes, food, money and basic living necessities. Some of them also go there to build home for them. It demonstrates that being aware of events happening around the world not only will inform people about those who need our helps, but also it will help people to have a chance to change the world.
In addition, it will help people to increase their general knowledge and be up-to-date. In today’s world it is of paramount importance that a person should have general information about happenings. Take my own experience as an example, my friend's field of study is journalism and she works for a local journal. She has to read world’s news to write papers for their journal to inform people. Being informative is very important for her. If she does not have information about latest events, she will not be able to write new papers. It indicates that it is essential for some people to know about the events due to their field.
Having discussed all reasons, I personally tend to go along with the idea that it is important for all of the people to know about occurrences around the world. It not only will help them to be aware of their environment, but also it will cause their contribution in catastrophic phenomena. It is hoped that by helping people that are in danger, the world will be a better place to live.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Suggestion: about the latest
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Suggestion: all the
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, regarding, so, as to, for instance, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1714.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70879120879 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62819491772 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.483516483516 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 537.3 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.1190475383 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.7 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.1 5.45110844103 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174676326513 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0627472596942 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0462985573503 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129379217261 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.036336849403 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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