young people nowadays do nor respect their teachers as much as they did in the past
We are living in a sophisticated age which respectfulness has a profound impact on children's lives. People are always trying to make their children's lives more convenient, delightful and successful. Some people believe that young people respect their teacher like the past, while others are convinced that young do not respect their teacher as much as they did in the past. After carefully pondering it from several aspects, I do strongly agree with the latter idea. There are some reasons, the most outstanding of which will be discussed in the ensuing paragraphs.
First of all, it is undoubted that parents spend most of their time out of the home and do not have adequate time to learn their children how to behave with their teachers. As a matter of fact, there is a direct link between the presence of parents at home and children behavior. To illustrate this fact, one needs only refer to the numerous children who fired from the school because of their behavior and lack of noticing their parents. however, in the past, children did not have any problem like this. Although there is no guarantee children respect their teacher if they parents teach them how to behave, what results from teaching children is to decrease the amount of impolite behavior in school. The noteworthy intelligible results, which conducted in our country, show that approximately 70 percentage of teachers report that most children do not respect them in the class.
The second reason why i agree with it is that, obviously, due to the progression of technology such as the TV and the internet, student have become familiar with wide varieties range of behavior. In fact, they are learning violent and others negative points from the TV easy and use this language in their daily activities such as interacting with their teachers. The modern world offers abundant examples of children who impressed by the social network in an unappropriated way. were i be a determiner in our country, I would have established a center to check the TV programs before showing these programs on the TV. There is a well-known proverb in Persian, the equivalent of which in English may sound like this" the more children immerse in social network, the more they would learn negative behavior".
To make a long story short, no one can deny the enormous effect of TV and lack of the presence of parents in home to lead young to learn bad behavior. Not only do they not respect their children, but also they will be unsuccessful in their future. For this reason, I highly recommended that parents care about their children behavior more.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: However
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Suggestion: parent
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Message: Consider replacing "in an unappropriated way" with adverb for "unappropriated"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Suggestion: Were
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Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to negative'
Suggestion: to negative
...cial network, the more they would learn negative behavior'. To make a long story s...
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Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to negative'.
Suggestion: to negative
...cial network, the more they would learn negative behavior'. To make a long story s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, well, while, in fact, such as, as a matter of fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2179.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 442.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92986425339 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67738076575 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 655.2 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.8349878091 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.684210526 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2631578947 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.89473684211 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.304484645679 0.236089414692 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0993140592913 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.151624173357 0.0737576698707 206% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21479055367 0.150856017488 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.139120488848 0.0645574589148 215% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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