ome young people have free time in the evenings after school or on days off from school. Which of the
following activities would be most beneficial for young people (ages 14-18) to do in their spare time?
Why?
- Gaining practical work experience either at a part time job or by volunteering in the community
-Learning to play a sport
- Learning to play a musical instrument
There are some moot points about which activities are most beneficial for young children to do in leisure time. The question of the best activities to do in spare time has aroused as a subject of controversy among academicians. When it comes to my position, I strongly subscribe to the point that the best choice is gaining practical work as a part-time job or volunteer in a community. I have some reasons two of which will be explicated hereunder.
The first reason worth discussing here is that today's due to the economic situation, there are not various job opportunities, therefore, individuals with a good resume and work experiences have a great priority to choose for an open position. Consequently, young people who gain practical work as part-time jobs have a great opportunity for carriers. As a case to the point, I vividly remember, two years ago I searched for a new job, as a result, I sent my cv to various corporations. One of them called me and scheduled an interview for me. After that interview with the boss of that company told me that one of the significant requirement for choosing in that job is a work experience in that field. My personal example competently corroborates to the point that practical works are important for young kids to gain the best job in the future.
By the same token, another reason to be mentioned here is that juveniles with 15-18 years old should choose the best major for their education thus, part-time job in a spare time help them to acquaint with various carriers and it has many advantages for selecting the major field of study. My personal experience demonstrates this reality when I was a high school student my father decided to send me to his friend companies for summer vacations. I went to that firms which worked in a civil engineering field. The corollary of this activity gives rise to I could familiar very well with that field and choose that field for my major because I realized that I had a common interest in civil engineering work. My personal example shed some light to the point that practical part-time job will help kids to the choice best field of study in the future.
To wrap it up, according to the aforementioned reasons, the best choice for kids leisure times is selecting a practical work as a part-time job because not only making a momentous work experience but also help to choose a precious major field of study.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, so, therefore, thus, well, as a result, by the same token
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1988.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 421.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72209026128 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79628443063 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.470308788599 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 630.9 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.9994969204 48.9658058833 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.25 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3125 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8125 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267116239745 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103328205248 0.076458572812 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0714874255816 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180803144445 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0537043064682 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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