Perhaps every one accepts the fact that celebrities have a significant influence on individuals in a society. in this regard, whether this prestigious social class affects all the people in a community in a similar way or not is a matter of debate. While some people believe that the millennial are more susceptible to be influenced by celebrities’ opinions than the elder members of society, others have the opposite view. Personally speaking, I am more inclined to the former view and the followings are the reasons to vindicate my standpoint.
To start with, the opinions of renowned individuals are important to youngsters since they are in the middle of personality development and this is important to have a role model to shape their traits base on that. Societies often display celebrities as symbols of a prosperous lifestyle and young people, eager to be successful in their own lives, earnestly follow them and heed to their views on life matters so that one day they would be an accomplished person too. on the contrary, the senior members of society do not have the enthusiasm of younger ones to follow celebrities, as they already have completed the development phase and it is less likely their personality is being affected by other people.
Furthermore, older people, due to their experiences, have realized that celebrities’ views do not reflect their true beliefs on most occasions, so they opt to not pay attention to such thoughts. To be more specific, they know that most of the speeches that renowned persons give in the media are articulated and aligned with the benefits of those who sponsored them, thus serving no purpose but to increase their popularity in society. In fact, it is quite likely that some famous people have notions opposite to what they express in public. Having known the essence of contents presented by celebrities, older people simply do not consider such opinions worthy enough to pay attention to. Unlike the elder people, the immaturity of juveniles impede them from understanding this fact and they blindly follow their role models.
To sum up, I strongly believe that celebrities affect young people views more than that of older people. this is because juveniles feel the urge to set a role model for their future, and because they are not as mature as the elder members of society to realize the paradox of celebrities’ true opinions and the ones they express in the media.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, so, thus, while, in fact, on the contrary, to start with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2048.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03194103194 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88816850351 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501228501229 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 655.2 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.762613867 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.285714286 100.406767564 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0714285714 20.6045352989 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.35714285714 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240753546886 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0904644203848 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0562445495731 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153065031015 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0425206557707 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 11.7677419355 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.49 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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