Without doubt, each society needs all of its members, especially youngsters, to contribute in public affairs in order to flourish. Although there are contrasting views regarding the commitment of the young to this important goal. While some believe that juveniles do not give much time to assisting their society, others think that they are actively engage in different communal activities. Personally speaking, I am of the same opinion with the latter and the following are the reaons to substantiate my standpoint.
First of all, most of the non-governmental organizations in each society run by groups of young members which have both enthusiasim and energy to fulfill the demanding goals of such organizations. The purpose of an NGO is usually to protect and cleanse society and green spaces. some of their plans involve intense physical works like hiking and gathering garbages out of a park or an urban area, so only young people who are more energetic, enthusiastic, and also have more free time than adults are willing to participate in such activities. My own experience in a environement protection group is a compelling example of this. I have recently joined in a non profit community, consisted of 50 active members, which announces weekly events for cleaning parks and green spaces in the city. Almost all of the members, including me, are between 20 to 30 years olds and despite rigorous activites, we enjoy doing something nice for our society.
Moreover, due to the ingenuity of young generation, numerous start-ups have been established offering internet-based civil services to facilitate interaction of people in society. Online shopping websites reduce the purchasing process from time consuming travel to and fro shopping centers to only a few clicks of mouse buttons. Had it not been for the vast ambitious and talent of the young, it would not have been possible to take such burdens out of the communities’ shoulders. For instance, one of the most renowned and widely-used applications in my city is called Digikala which offers online-shopping service like Amazon . many people are now using it, because they can choose whatever they need , pay online, and wait until their purchase is being delivered to them without any extra cost. the interesting thing about Digikala is that its founder and chief excecutive officer is a 35 years old genius. it worths mentioning that there are other online applications offering various services which their ideas were first put forth by a young mind. This clearly show that young individuals greatly serve their communities.
To sum up, I believe that young people have devoted their time and lives to assist their societies. This is because, they form NGOs to protect their communities and green spaces , and also they develop online services to ease the way people conducting their businesses.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, regarding, so, thus, while, for instance, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2411.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 463.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20734341253 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89641148139 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 278.0 212.727598566 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.600431965443 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 753.3 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.8667014944 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.55 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.15 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.85 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156847952838 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0452958324363 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.042539489418 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102551706058 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0254316174016 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.28 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 86.8835125448 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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