Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Even though a vast majority of people explicitly state that, nowadays,youngsters are not prone to help their communities, there are still some people who utterly contradict this stance. From my point of view, young people are exceedingly supportive for their communities, and I uphold this idea for three core reasons, which are elucidated below.
To begin with, the presence of social media is advantageous for raising awareness, and teenagers utilize social media invariably. In other words, posts, photos in the social media disseminates the issues in nearby communities, and convenes youngsters to tackle these problems. A compelling example of this argument is a post that I have encountered recently; the post was concerning a fire accident in the dwelling near the street I am residing, and the financial problems the family had. After seeing this post, I instantly asked my mother for some money, and then, conveyed it to that family. As it is evident from my personal experience, social media- emerged in 21st century- encourages teens to get inclined to help their communities.
In addition, currently, a plethora of schools and universities are setting mandatory volunteering for their students, and if students do not fulfil these tasks, they will not be able to meet the credits required for graduation. A lucid example that sheds the spotlight on this thesis is my school; my school, in the last years of students, demands them to volunteer, which is usually to succour their communities. My friends and I, for example, purchased some households for poor families, and accomplished our volunteering assignment. Thus, contemporarily, teenagers are dedicating their time in order to assist people who are living close to them.
In light of thoughts elaborated upon, I would like to conclude that currently, youngsters are devoting countless hours helping their communities. A philosopher, whose name eludes my mind right now, once mentioned, " the social media, current educational systems, and technology has got an array of drawbacks, but one of its advantages is that they are persuading children to become kind-hearted, benevolent people in the future".
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, still, then, thus, well, for example, in addition, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1848.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 343.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38775510204 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10445663181 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.615160349854 0.524837075471 117% => OK
syllable_count: 564.3 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.86738351254 482% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.0167625313 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.153846154 100.406767564 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3846153846 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.15384615385 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150525512373 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0533189933956 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0394362773657 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0919746681224 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0389312172084 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 11.7677419355 145% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 10.9000537634 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.71 8.01818996416 121% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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