TPO-37- Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Many people nowadays spend too much money on their pets (dogs, cats, or other animals), although there are better uses for this money.Use specific reasons and example
In this progressive and sophisticated world, people have been encouraged to do a wide range of tasks during their entire lives to keep pace with the development of their surrounded circumstances. The controversial question that arises in this regard is that whether doing numerous various things can hinder people from being good at what they do or not. While some people are inclined towards the idea that doing many different things cannot interfere with being good at what people do, others are against this point of view. As far as I am concerned, I am of the opinion that doing various things at the same time can prevent us from being masters at what we do. In the following paragraph, I will delve into some reasons and examples justifying my point of view.
The first reason coming to my mind is that since being skillful and master in everything requires us to allocate a considerable amount of time and energy, dividing our time and energy for different things lead to waste a great amount of our valuable time. Therefore, we are not able to develop our skills and knowledge in a specific area by finding our weaknesses and strengths since this process is time-consuming. For instance, I remember once a renowned magazine interviewed a famous electrical engineer in our town; they asked him about his secret of success, he answered, it is easy and straightforward, just spend all of your time on one occupation, and learn and practice a lot, this approach will give you an opportunity to learn what you need to be expert in your field.
Another noteworthy reason is that dedicating our lives to many different things can prevent us from investing our lives in our talent and real interest. If one occupies themselves with a lot of relevant or irrelevant subjects to their gift and interest, their scope of knowledge in every subject including their potential field of interest will be shallow and trivial. For instance, my brother who is a curious and industrious person always modify his field of study and work from one field to another, as a result, he always complaining why he is not as successful as my younger brother is, while his problem stems from not focusing in his own talent.
To summarize, from what has been discussed above doing countless things at the same time not only wastes one's time and energy to improve their skills but also prevents them from dedicating their life to their real interest and talent.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 414, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...re inclined towards the idea that doing many different things cannot interfere with being good...
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Line 3, column 59, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
... reason is that dedicating our lives to many different things can prevent us from investing ou...
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Line 4, column 106, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...things at the same time not only wastes ones time and energy to improve their skills...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, therefore, while, for instance, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2021.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 420.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8119047619 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69699063836 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528571428571 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 627.3 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 20.1344086022 174% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.818962324 48.9658058833 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 168.416666667 100.406767564 168% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.0 20.6045352989 170% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.75 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140257615911 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0613323281132 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0387372358285 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0827193939966 0.150856017488 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0459448634227 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.7 11.7677419355 159% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.41 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.1575268817 156% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.21 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.0537634409 159% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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