Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Many people nowadays spend too much money on their pets (dogs, cats, or other animals), although there are better uses for their money.
Pets are human’s animal companions and are considered by many as their family members. However, I believe that people are spending too much on them and should instead use this money to meet the demand for more practical needs.
First, people need this money to help them stay competitive in the labor market. Nowadays, most people face fierce competition at work and might face challenges from fresh graduates who possess comparatively more up-to-date knowledge and skills. As a result, as people get old, they will become less productive, which means they will not be as competitive as younger people and might lose their jobs while needing to support their families. One way to avoid this issue is for people to continue their education, acquiring new skills that would allow them to be more valuable to their employees, thus increasing the stability of their employment. And the money for the education that makes them productive can come from not raising a pet. Typically, the cost of owning a pet at home includes food, medical bills, and toys for pets. From a long-term perspective, money saved from these expenses would be more than enough to pay for people’s continuous education.
Second, human lives matter more than animal lives. Although it is undeniable that pets are humanity’s faithful friends, human lives are at risk for not having enough food or access to clean drinking water. Today, many people live in poverty because of the unbalanced development of the world economy or are refugees fleeing conflicting regions. Their lives are in peril - many would die of famine or warfare if humanitarian aid does not come in time, meaning each dollar saved from not paying for unnecessary things can help. On the other hand, many people from relatively wealthier families keep pets as toys or ways to kill time. And this means that, unlike people living solitarily, they do not necessarily need pets in their lives for companionship. So, if these people can cut unnecessary expenditures on pets and donate such money to those in need, many human lives can be saved.
To conclude, the money saved by not spending on pets can help people stay competitive or help people in grave needs.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, so, thus, while, as to, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1840.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 368.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59257685487 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554347826087 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 569.7 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.9655944763 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.235294118 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6470588235 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.82352941176 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303918424073 0.236089414692 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105666842263 0.076458572812 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0517035031767 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212521332014 0.150856017488 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0558667817179 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.