Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Many people nowadays spend too much money on their pets (dogs, cats, or other animals), although there are better uses for their money.
Pets are human’s animal companions and are considered by many as their family members. However, I believe that people are spending too much on them and should use this money to meet the demand for more practical needs.
First, people need this money to help them stay competitive in the labor market. Nowadays, most people face fierce competition in their work environment and might face challenges from fresh graduates who possess more up-to-date knowledge and skills. As a result, as people get old, they will become less competitive and might lose their jobs while needing to support their families. One way to avoid this issue is for people to continue their education, acquiring new skills that allow them to be more valuable to their employees, thus keeping their jobs. And the money paying for such education can come from not raising a pet. Typically, the cost of owning a pet at home includes food, medical bills, and toys for pets. From a long-term perspective, saving this would amount to a large sum of money, which could be enough for people’s continuous education.
Second, human lives matter more than animal lives. Although it is undeniable that pets are humanity’s faithful friends, human lives are at risk for not having enough food or access to clean drinking water. Today, many people live in poverty because of the unbalanced development of the world economy or are refugees fleeing conflicting regions. Their lives are in peril - many would die if humanitarian aid does not come in time, meaning each dollar saved from not paying for unnecessary things can help. On the other hand, many people from relatively wealthier families keep pets as toys or ways to kill time. And this means that, unlike people living solitarily, they do not necessarily need pets in their lives for companionship. So, if people can cut unnecessary expenditures on pets, this saved money can help those in need.
To conclude, the money saved by not spending on pets can help people stay competitive or help people in grave needs.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, so, thus, while, as to, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1703.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 341.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99413489736 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55220952681 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.58064516129 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 518.4 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.4095021881 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.176470588 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0588235294 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.82352941176 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.316333801671 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108168006413 0.076458572812 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0504305213956 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219866048034 0.150856017488 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0585180342723 0.0645574589148 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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