Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is undeniable that modern life is becoming very complex, so I agree with the statement that it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize. Consequently, they will be able to face this complexity of modern life.
First, having the ability to plan and organize help people to remember what they have to do without missing anything in their schedule. For instance, my younger brother is a university student. At the same time, he works a part time job as a pharmacy technician. Moreover, he has to visit my parent twice a week to take care of them. Last year, he used to be an unorganized person. Unfortunately, he missed his exam because he was at my parent house. In fact, he benifits from this, and he learns from his mistake how to plan for his life.
Second, planning and organizing is a time and money saver. In our modern life, time is money. If you are able to plan for your days, months and years, your plan will help you to save and make more money. Back to my brother example, when he missed his exam, he lost a lot of money. he had to register and pay for the same class twice. In addition to that, his graduation delayed, and he is not going to finish his degree until next year. that's why I think planning and organizing our life is essential to save our time and our money as will.
To sum up, the ability to plan and organize is important not omly to keep us alert of what we have to do, but it also crucial to save our time and money. Therefore, I am trying to teach my children how to organize their life at young age, so their life in the future will be easier for them. Since I believe their life is going to be more complex than our nodern life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... in the future will be easier for them. Since I believe their life is going to be mor...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, as to, for instance, i think, in addition, in fact, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1374.0 1977.66487455 69% => OK
No of words: 324.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.24074074074 4.8611393121 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31207244963 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.506172839506 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 450.9 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.7874029987 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.3157894737 100.406767564 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0526315789 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.84210526316 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281109587373 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0918894237193 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105631419468 0.0737576698707 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209095740421 0.150856017488 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113860933877 0.0645574589148 176% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.1 11.7677419355 60% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.02 10.9000537634 64% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.62 8.01818996416 83% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 86.8835125448 51% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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