Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children over the age of 15 should be allowed to vote.
Although People in the democracy have the freedom to elect their leaders, letting an individual vote is a great responsibility. So there has been no shortage of debate about who can vote. However, the question is did the 15 years is an appropriate age to vote? Some people believe it is perfectly acceptable to vote when they are 15 years old because they are mature enough to take the correct decision. On the other hand, I personally feel it is not a good idea to allow people to vote at a very young age for reasons I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, selecting best leader is a serious task because it impacts on the whole nation. However, the children from very young age, they just came out their schooling and they don’t have a minimum idea about the importance of their vote and its impact. If a person goes for voting without any prior knowledge gives a vulnerable results and this is not good for the society. Recently conducted Omak community election is the best example for this. The community allowed young children to vote and the result was favorable to least experience leader. What more, the whole community was suffering with poor development such as lack of proper roads and sanitation.
In addition to that, people at young age are more influenced with their parents, because they don’t have enough knowledge to take their own decisions. eventually, their parents determine to whom to they vote which is not good for the society. My cousin Alex is best example for this. When he was very young he got his vote. Since he don’t have basic idea about the politics, every time he asks his parents. What more they suggest him as per their own interest.
In conclusion, even though everyone in the society has a right to elect their leaders it is necessary to get enough understanding before they go for voting. Young people don’t have enough prior knowledge about politics and more likely to influence with their parents. So I personally recommend fifteen years is not a good enough age to vote.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, in addition, in conclusion, such as, on the whole, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1699.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 357.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75910364146 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54992134756 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.509803921569 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 546.3 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.1080554362 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.95 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.85 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144735700172 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0511043202737 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0455052492948 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0990284008006 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0478594991709 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.03 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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