Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the contemporary world, advertisements impersonate a prominent role in the market to promote new products. So there has been no shortage of debate about the influence of Ads among society. However, the question is does the television announcements benefits young adulthood? some people believe children podcast on television should be restricted because it spoils their studies. On the other hand, I personally feel advertisements relate to children in the podcast provides enormous information to the toddlers for reasons I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, Most of the corporates started using podcasting as a main source to promote their products. Ads allow children to know about the updated information of the product; it includes the latest version of the computer, mobile phones, and other electronic and non-electronic items. My friend son Alex is a good example to illustrate this. When he was studying fourth grade, his class teacher suggests him to buy the tablet to do his assignments. When his father started searching for a better tablet, he suggested him the latest version of the Apple tablet. His father was surprised and asked him curiously, how you know this information? he said that I saw in the podcast.
In addition, television announcements support children to get better grades in class because some of the Ads enable the latest scientific information visually; which allow students to understand the topic they studied in the classroom. For an instance, when I recently went to my uncle's house his son was watching the national geography channel. Surprisingly, he writes down the information that he was watching. I was really surprised and asked him, he said that his next class is all about the American national geography.
In conclusion, although some people disagree with my ideas. I fell, broadcasting gives enormous knowledge to children. It supports them to gain updated knowledge and to get good grades in the class. so I suggest everyone allow their children to watch broadcast to obtain knowledge.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, really, so, in addition, in conclusion, you know, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1730.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 331.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22658610272 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96985767024 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.558912386707 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 523.8 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.3151931202 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.5 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.55 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.124233394137 0.236089414692 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0363829985094 0.076458572812 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0350822777603 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0799469160052 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0475751611674 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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