Which technology, in your opinion, has had the greatest impact on our lives? Use examples and reasons to support your argument.
1) smartphones
2) television
3) cars
In the contemporary world, people are highly influenced by technology in routine life because it makes their work easy. So there is no shortage of opinion whether technology such as; android mobiles, television and automobiles impact on the society. If I were asked, I definitely chose smart phones are influence a lot of young adults among the other two technologies. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, mobile phones are less expansive and everybody can afford. In the current emerging trend, we can buy a mobile phone for less than hundred dollars and it is not possible to purchase television or a car with in that budget. My friend Alex is a good example to illustrate this. When we were studying high school at Omak public school, he brought brand new I phone with his pocket money. What more, he completely adducted to his phone I feel this is only happened because of less cost.
In addition, young people are easily addicted to the smart phone compare to other technology because they can be used for numerous purposes like playing video games, communication, and internet access for watching videos. Smart phones could influence both positively and negatively. The good impacts are they can be used it communicate with our beloved once. On the other hand, mobiles also negatively attract students like browsing restricted websites and wasting plenty of time on watching unnecessary videos. For example, when I was working as a professor at university, once of my students used play online games rather concentrating on the class, as a result, he got least grades.
In conclusion, although some people disagree with my opinion, I feel that Mobil phones are highly influenced on people compare other technology because it is cheap and it had a plenty of information. If the people don’t have enough money, they couldn’t spend money to buy television or car because they are expensive.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 287, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to smart'
Suggestion: to smart
...ty. If I were asked, I definitely chose smart phones are influence a lot of young adu...
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Line 2, column 145, Rule ID: NODT_DOZEN[1]
Message: Use simply: 'a hundred'.
Suggestion: a hundred
...we can buy a mobile phone for less than hundred dollars and it is not possible to purch...
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Line 2, column 497, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... is only happened because of less cost. In addition, young people are easily add...
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Line 3, column 326, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'communicates'?
Suggestion: communicates
...he good impacts are they can be used it communicate with our beloved once. On the other han...
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Line 3, column 670, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[3]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'got the least'.
Suggestion: got the least
...entrating on the class, as a result, he got least grades. In conclusion, although some p...
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Line 4, column 328, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...sion or car because they are expensive.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, for example, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1642.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 328.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00609756098 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75398553871 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.585365853659 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 533.7 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.1688112268 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.625 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.3125 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0702601788355 0.236089414692 30% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0252209326151 0.076458572812 33% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0306050992213 0.0737576698707 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0434313876032 0.150856017488 29% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0123438186571 0.0645574589148 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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