Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the contemporary world, people performing a variety of tasks for self-satisfaction. so There has been no shortage of debate about how and where to invest the time. However, the question is did the people spending more time on entertainment than the significant task. Some people believe in the current generation, people wasting huge time because of advanced technology; playing video games, watching television. On the other hand, I personally feel, people in the contemporary world people profound on their career goals rather spending time on unnecessary tasks for reasons I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, people from the current generation are innovative, so everybody should work hard to prove themselves. If people working on different tasks, they don't have enough time for leisure activities. My friend Alex is a good example to illustrates this. when we were studying Masters at Ohio state university; He designed a video game software as a part of his thesis. While doing that work, sometimes he didn't have time to sleep because he used to spend his whole time in the lab, as a result, he becomes an innovator. I feel it is not possible if he allows time for enjoyment.
In addition, nowadays people are doing multitask for respectful and wealth life in society. People doing numerous tasks to gain more money certainly because no one considers if we don't have money; In fact, it is hard to survive without having money and people concentrating to obtain more money rather entertainment. Consider my uncle as an example. He is working as an orthopedic doctor and he earns good money but he also does the real estate for extra income. Surprisingly, He used to come to home only to sleep and eat.
In conclusion, people from the current generation don't have time to spend on leisure activities. they are very focused on their career and earning money.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, while, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1570.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 317.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95268138801 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82262648836 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.567823343849 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 508.5 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.1553659329 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.2222222222 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6111111111 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.94444444444 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188614054642 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0565499301669 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0453948945966 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112320660871 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.018314276663 0.0645574589148 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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