Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is an undeniable fact that our behaviour mainly is affected by the psychologic conception. Enjoyment and entertaining activities are among the most common factors that capture human beings' attention, and lead to doing things that actually is not necessary; but, is the response to our psychological needs. We repeat some actions and fun activities instead of doing things that we should do. There are some probable reasons why we do such things that are not essential in the first glance. Habits and addiction to enjoyments, the release of the stress of other tasks, and provoking good memories are among the reasons that we carry out some unnecessary things.
First and foremost, It is established beyond doubt that most of our actions are taken place on the ground that they become habits in our life. We sit down in front of the tv for hours, for instance, and change channels frequently. These habitual actions have become parts of our life since we repeat them often; also, it is enjoyable.
Secondly, the sophisticated and obligatory tasks that we accomplish because we committed to do them, put more stress on our brain. We need to figure out ways to mitigate these loads of stress and feel alleviated. Therefore, One reasonable way seems to do fun activities and joyful actions. At first glance these actions may seem inessential, however, to get a balanced soul, psychologically speaking, enjoyment-doing things are inevitable.
Last but not least, It is crystal clear that we love to provoke positive memories. Take, for instance, doing artworks. Individuals may perform some artistic behaviour, which is not their real profession, On the other hand, by doing these actions, they feel relieved, and they enjoy doing it since actions provoke good memories.
To sum up, I think it is now evident that besides our daily routine, we need to do some actions to satisfy our souls. Although we concentrate the majority of our time on doing the required works, to have a balanced life, we ought to do some enjoyable activities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 186, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'beings'' or 'being's'?
Suggestion: beings'; being's
... most common factors that capture human beings attention, and lead to doing things tha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, i think, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1769.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 348.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08333333333 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78491272198 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548850574713 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 536.4 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.5259837963 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.2777777778 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3333333333 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.72222222222 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276242190644 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101823437059 0.076458572812 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0993539482954 0.0737576698707 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147227847722 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100068001892 0.0645574589148 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.