Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In contemporary society, different people hold different perspectives about their life. However, some people argue that these days, people use too much time doing their personal beloved activities rather than doing their duty. Although it seems reasonable, I strongly disagree with such notion. I personally believe that people should spend much time for their enjoyment. This essay will provide further aspects and examples to support this idea.
First and foremost, people, today can attain their life with what they love to do. This is because there are many enjoyable activities in this modern day that can be a successful profession. Therefore, it is unnecessary to only dedicate on doing things people should do anymore because people have more alternative careers than in the past generation. To illustrate this, there are many online-occupations that occur in the internet society, and one of these careers is a travel blogger. Travel bloggers are people who travel around the world and review their trip on the webpages, so they spend their time doing their beloved activities with their incomes.
Secondly, doing beloved activities soothes people’s soul and effectively improves their skills. It is undeniable that enjoyable things fulfill life’s passion, and give meaning to one’s life. Additionally, if people focus on beloved things they will be able to develop their skills faster. On the contrary, people will be disinterested when they do their job. I can attest this from my own experience, my family and I love traveling; I travel in many places such as Japan and Korea, and I using all the holidays to doing enjoyable things. In fact, traveling literally raises my job passion. Observing on many cultures and architectures inspires my creativity and broaden my design to have more international identities.
In conclusion, I totally disagree that people spend too much time on their love things. This is due to the fact that enjoyable things are not only capable to success people’s occupation but also are effectively improved their skills.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'I am'?
Suggestion: I am
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, in conclusion, in fact, such as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1767.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 329.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37082066869 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85363556314 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.534954407295 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 545.4 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.6393669882 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.0 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3157894737 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.89473684211 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.3354121254 0.236089414692 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110643981314 0.076458572812 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0967962737694 0.0737576698707 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.22174648776 0.150856017488 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0590942671445 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.57 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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