Some parents forbid young children from owning smart phones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?

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Some parents forbid young children from owning smart phones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?

In the twentieth century, smart phones playing vital role in young children, because they are utilizing for variety of purpose such as social media, watching videos and so on. So, there has been no shortage of debate about whether or not smart phone good for youngsters. However, the question is, should parents allow their children to use smart phones? Some people believe it is perfectly acceptable for using smart phone, as they can provide the updated information to the adults. On the other hand, I personally believe parents should restrict their children to use smart phones for reasons I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, smart phones can distract the children concentration which is not good for their studies. Some students often use their phone to play games and watch videos, they eventually addicted to those games and podcasting. As a result, they will get least grades in the class. My friend Alex is a good example for this. When were studying high school at Omak public school, his parents gifted a smart phone for his birthday. Since that, he was a class toper however; when he started using phone he addicted to online games hence he got least grade in the class. I think it wouldn’t happen, if he don’t have phone.
In addition to that, children using smart phones are frequently getting ophthalmic issues, because continue use stress the eyes. Since most of the smart phones are having a small screen, so people need to put extra effort to read or watch in the cell phone. What more, eyes get affected. Take my cousin Drew as an example to illustrate this. When he was in the ninth grade, he started using Apple phone. Initially, he had used it for his class work but he started watching online adult movies and later he becomes a addicted to that game show. As a result he was diagnosed with cataract problem and recently he did surgery for that. This example is clearly illustrated how badly the smart phones impact on children. So, it is necessary for parents to control the use of smart phones.
In conclusion, although some may disagree, I personally feel that Parents should keep their children away from the smart phone. Cell phone distract the student carrier and negatively impact on their health. So, I recommend student it is necessary to keep it in control.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 224, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...re has been no shortage of debate about whether or not smart phone good for youngsters. Howeve...
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Line 2, column 252, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[3]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'get the least'.
Suggestion: get the least
... and podcasting. As a result, they will get least grades in the class. My friend Alex is ...
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Line 2, column 623, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'phoned'.
Suggestion: phoned
...dn't happen, if he don't have phone. In addition to that, children using s...
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Line 3, column 514, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...nline adult movies and later he becomes a addicted to that game show. As a result...
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Line 4, column 271, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... it is necessary to keep it in control.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, may, so, i think, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1925.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 400.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8125 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41338843745 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5275 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 579.6 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 12.0 3.51792114695 341% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.4821948471 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.2083333333 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6666666667 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.20833333333 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285132850786 0.236089414692 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.095931957437 0.076458572812 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0637417912785 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20361308306 0.150856017488 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0510459821941 0.0645574589148 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.32 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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