Many people believe that more people should be allowed to vote, even to a point where they think people over the age of only 15 can vote. I however disagree with these people, as I think it would be worse for our society to let young people vote.
First of all, I believe younger people would more likely be capable of causing chaos. Younger people are often more immature than a normal adult. This immaturity could be the cause of something even as big as an apocalypse. One example was when I was 9 years old. The kids at my school had a day where the teachers allowed us to do whatever we wanted to. It ended up as many children being chaotic, and not understanding what being calm was. Afterwards, I knew that if children had too much power in this world, our world could become dangerous.
My second reason, is that younger people would not know what is righteous, and inferior. Usually, younger kids would think more of doing harmful things. One example is that some kids would make bad decisions, such as potentially doing illegal drugs. Some adults may also do this, but most people above 18 would choose not to do something that could get you in a bad position or maybe even arrested.
I think that it is good that only people above the age of 18 can vote. I think if they were any younger, they would not make the right choices, and make choices that could even start a large war. Kids could also start pandemonium, and potentially start an apocalypse. Overall, I think kids should never get too much power.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, i think, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 52.1666666667 38% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1251.0 1977.66487455 63% => OK
No of words: 278.0 407.700716846 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.5 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.28129314902 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 212.727598566 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.535971223022 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 384.3 618.680645161 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 4.94265232975 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.4499195759 48.9658058833 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 73.5882352941 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3529411765 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.58823529412 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 11.8709677419 8% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201075828625 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0598748767739 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0633747390705 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126191006872 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0837179809777 0.0645574589148 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.9 11.7677419355 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.52 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.7 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 86.8835125448 46% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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