Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children over the age of 15 should be allowed to vote.
Election is a serious task in the society because it’s results impact on the whole nation. So, there has been no shortage of debate about who can vote. However, the question is whether or not over fifteen year older letting vote. Some people believe it is absolutely acceptable to vote over fifteen years for a better society. On the other hand, I personally feel that the society would become worse, if young children where allow to vote for reason I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, fifteen year is a very young age, children at this age lack of emotions needed to take intelligent decisions when choosing a leader because they are immature. In addition to that, people at this age group have a lack of knowledge to distinguish true valuable with most exciting things. The politicians often give emotional speech such as increasing holidays and financial support and other entertainment activities to grab the youngster’s attention. In fact it is not a good approach to select the best leader. So people must need to understand the significance of their vote which is only possible after getting enough maturity.
In addition to that, it would be a mistaken to allow young child to vote because they simply copy their parent’s preference. For example, during the elections, the voters are often influenced by financial factors such as tax benefits and financial support. While the children at this age are not independent on finance, their parents force them to vote as per their preference for economical benefits although which is not good in the democracy.
In conclusion, even though everyone in the society has a right to elect their leaders it is necessary to get enough understanding before they go for voting. Young people don’t have enough prior knowledge about politics and more likely to influence with their parents. So I personally recommend fifteen years is not a good enough age to vote.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 183, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
... who can vote. However, the question is whether or not over fifteen year older letting vote. S...
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Line 1, column 437, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'voting'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: voting
...me worse, if young children where allow to vote for reason I will explore in the follow...
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Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
...hem to vote as per their preference for economical benefits although which is not good in ...
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Line 3, column 451, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ugh which is not good in the democracy. In conclusion, even though everyone in t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, such as, on the whole, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1626.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 324.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01851851852 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75993584104 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.567901234568 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 518.4 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.8730407042 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.625 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.25 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0625 5.45110844103 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172840540341 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0562272237979 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.046199335009 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105339221619 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0338285628965 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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