Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the contemporary world, people are performing a variety of tasks for their self-satisfaction. some are focusing on career and others are relaxing according to their interest. So there has been no shortage of debate about the significance of time. However, the question is does the people giving high priority for entertainment? Some people believing young generation giving importance for self - enjoyment definitely; like playing video games and watching television. On the other hand, I personally feel people are investing time meaningfully for reasons, I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, people from the current generation are innovative; so, everybody should work hard to prove themselves. If people working on new tasks, they don't have enough time for leisure activities because they need to invest time for new discoveries. My friend Alex is a good example to illustrates this. when we were studying Masters at Ohio state university; He designed a video game software as a part of his thesis. While he working on software; he used to stay in the lab whole night without sleep, as a result, he becomes an innovator. what more he got a huge amount of scholarship for his further studies. I feel it is not possible if he allows time for enjoyment.
In addition, nowadays people are doing multitasks for respectful and wealth life in society. People doing numerous tasks to gain more money certainly because no one considers if we don't have money; In fact, it is hard to survive without having money and people concentrating to obtain more money rather entertainment. Consider my uncle as an example. He is working as an orthopedic doctor and he earns good money but he also does real estate for extra income. Surprisingly, He used to come to home only to sleep and eat.
In conclusion, people from the current generation don't have time to spend on leisure activities. they are very focused on their carrier and earning money.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, while, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 11.0286738351 9% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1629.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 326.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99693251534 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89233915526 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.592024539877 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 528.3 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.3998792269 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.45 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135220879334 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0383221998442 0.076458572812 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0408364745066 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.081639351437 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0124146862846 0.0645574589148 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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