Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the contemporary world, people performing a variety of tasks for self-satisfaction. some are focusing on career and others are relaxing. so There has been no shortage of debate about how and where to invest the time. However, the question is did the people spending more time on entertainment than the significant task. Some people believing that current generation people wasting huge time for enjoyment like playing video games and watching television. On the other hand, I personally feel people, investing time for a better career. for reasons I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, people from the current generation are innovative, so everybody should work hard to prove themselves. If people working on new tasks, they don't have enough time for leisure activities. My friend Alex is a good example to illustrates this. when we were studying Masters at Ohio state university; He designed a video game software as a part of his thesis. While he working on software; he used to stay in the lab whole night without sleep, as a result, he becomes an innovator. what more he got a huge amount of scholarship for his further studies. I feel it is not possible if he allows time for enjoyment.
In addition, nowadays people are doing multitasks for respectful and wealth life in society. People doing numerous tasks to gain more money certainly because no one considers if we don't have money; In fact, it is hard to survive without having money and people concentrating to obtain more money rather entertainment. Consider my uncle as an example. He is working as an orthopedic doctor and he earns good money but he also does real estate for extra income. Surprisingly, He used to come to home only to sleep and eat.
In conclusion, people from the current generation don't have time to spend on leisure activities. they are very focused on their carrier and earning money.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, while, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1572.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 321.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89719626168 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80756747865 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.588785046729 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 509.4 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.2826746574 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.8571428571 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2857142857 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95238095238 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145637990916 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0418529492201 0.076458572812 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0408687962565 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0869031436344 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0198042774595 0.0645574589148 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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