TPO-5 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.

In view of psychology, if you do some tasks that you love and enjoy to do it, you never give up and spend most of time of your life on it until you reach success. In my perspective, humans, now, provide time on personal enjoyment. However, we have chores ever days and we should do them. There are some reasons, and I enjoy exploring a good portion of them.
As a priority, these days mankind become familiar by new technologies being attractive. Thus, humans have a genuine liking to spend time with it. Now, we have a great accessible on computers. We use them to see movies, shows or to borrow in internet and have a good time. For example, Andy is my friend. When he is in the library and studies or does my assignments, he spends most time on utilizing a computer. He believes it is interesting. Also, since getting tired, he uses internet to play online games. In addition, people have high technologies phone which spend a lot times with it. Now, we have a plenty of apps and social Medias that we spend hours to watch them because we have a great loving of using them. As a result, we love spending times on new technologies.
Moreover, governments, psychologists and doctors suggest that we spend more time on personal enjoyment. They recommend that we opt a job that we have a great passion it. As a consequence, we find a fun live, and we reach any points we want quickly. Furthermore, if we do not have time on materials which we love it, we get depressed. For example, imagine a job such as office that every day we spend time on it, and we do not like it. After a while, we become bored, weary, tried. On the other hand, if we change it to do and spend time on works that we love, we try hard on it and trying hard precedes success.
Whereas, we spend most lives on personal enjoyment now, we do some chores which we oblige to accomplish. We should do the class assignment even though we do not overjoy to do it. People persuade to carry out it in that it is essential.
In sum up,

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 63, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'enjoy doing'.
Suggestion: enjoy doing
... if you do some tasks that you love and enjoy to do it, you never give up and spend most of...
Line 2, column 22, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'days'' or 'day's'?
Suggestion: days'; day's
... portion of them. As a priority, these days mankind become familiar by new technolo...
Line 4, column 196, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'carrying'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'persuade' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: carrying
...o not overjoy to do it. People persuade to carry out it in that it is essential. In su...
Line 5, column 11, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion: in that it is essential. In sum up,

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, thus, whereas, while, for example, in addition, such as, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1627.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 375.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.33866666667 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56774661263 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.490666666667 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 522.0 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.0978466916 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 62.5769230769 100.406767564 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.4230769231 20.6045352989 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.11538461538 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205516417013 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0688959455862 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0830336076304 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184646918158 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0947583430936 0.0645574589148 147% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.2 11.7677419355 53% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.3 10.9000537634 67% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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