TPO-5 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.
This is one of the controversial issues among people because the result of that determines peoples' comfortably in comparison with the past. I completely disagree with this claim that today people spend most of their time for doing their favorite activities. Here you can see my reasons.
First, doing an enjoyment activities can waste people' time. Nowadays, by emerging the economic crisis around the world, finding job becomes one of the people's difficulties. Because of that, people spend most of their time for learning useful skills to improve their chance of finding a suitable job. Also, they prefer to do some extra job to earn more money for managing their lives and gain new experiences instead of doing some unbeneficial enjoyment activities. For example, most of the students working in some library, restaurant, and company for becoming ready for their future job alongside with studying.
Second. Preventing from learning is another noticeable reason. Todays, people face with the huge advancement and improvement in different field of sciences and technology. This developmenets change people' attitude about the style of living. Now, education becomes one of the people's most important preference. They spend a lot of time for passing several classes or connect with other people around the world to expand their knowledge and information. However, in the past education was not an important factor among people, and people preferred to spend their time for having pleasure time and doing their personal activities.
On the other hand, some people assert that nowadays people spend a lot of time for their amusing personal activities. Mostly, the new technology assists people live more comfortable since they have more free time. For example, the internet helps people to buy their favorite things in a minimum of time. So, they have more time to have an enjoyment time. However, I still declare that today's people spend most of their time for doing their duty. Although new technology eliminates most of the people's difficulties, it brings a lot of extra duty for people. For example, most of the mother enrol their children in several classes such as sport, music, English and France language which take both mother and children time. So, most of the time they even do not have a chance to see their friends.
In conclusion, now people' difficulties completely change their style of living. So, they spend their time for resolving them like studying hard to improve their situation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, second, so, still, for example, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 15.1003584229 20% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2100.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 405.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18518518519 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59561258558 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.476543209877 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 650.7 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.464991298 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.5 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.875 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.125 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246765293781 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0896178493447 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.076759297839 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166340959517 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0435078416855 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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