Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.
There are certain considerations or factors that everyone takes into account in whether people spend too much time on personal entertainments or enjoyments. some people may agree while others don’t dependent on particular reasons, such as life goal, obligation, human rights, and so forth. However, answers for this peculiar question could be very subjective and relative. In my belief, I definitely agree that people already spend too much time on their hobbies or interests rather than do what they should do.
overindulgence in enjoyment could be harmful and dangerous to health and learning. many people often only do what they want to do because these things are easier or interesting, in this case, the enjoyments. they’re pursuing what they love, but forget what’s more vital. For example, many students addict to play video games, commonly seen, because they are too young or immature to know what they should do. they may spend whole days playing video games since these things are attractive and easier to do. In the long time run, overindulgence in playing video games not only have them less attention to studying, but also adverse to eye health.
spending too much time on enjoyment is a way of escaping from what they should do. instead of studying hard, a painful process, some students choose continuing playing games as a way to immerse themselves into other worlds. they are not brave to face the reality, but soaked their victory in virtual worlds. Obviously, it’s disadvantageous to their social network development as well as academic credits. On the contrary, pupils who have better self-discipline pay more attention to their studying which is what students’ obligation. In the long run, they could achieve more than academic success.
Besides pupils, adults have their obligations as well. parents who should pay more attention to take cares their children instead of pursing self-satisfaction. if parents spend lots of time drinking and playing, then they have no time caring their children. if they don’t have time to teach children properly, children tend to lost and mis-behave. In contrast, if parents who take responsibilities to look after their children have motivation or necessities to work for raising their children, then it is absolutely helpful to children’s personality development as well as behavior development.
In conclusion, the advantages of re-directing attention from personal enjoyment to what people should do are healthier, essential to success, and better interpersonal relationship developments.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ather than do what they should do. overindulgence in enjoyment could be harmful and dange...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, look, may, so, then, well, while, for example, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, as well as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2202.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 402.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.4776119403 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05984710247 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534825870647 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 657.0 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.3397849445 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.090909091 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2727272727 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.54545454545 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.34671706178 0.236089414692 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111482295409 0.076458572812 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.137392272867 0.0737576698707 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208878476598 0.150856017488 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100142519975 0.0645574589148 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.5 10.9000537634 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.