Do you agree or disagree with the following statement, children under age 16 should attend school.
Schools are considered to be the best source of building the bright future in young adults' lives. Some people believe, it is unnecessary for children to attend schools; they think that home and family are deemed to be the responsible for their children's lives. In contrary, others disagree. As far as I am concerned, I agree with the importance of the school for all kids under age sixteen. For many, those kids are immature at that age, teachers at school teach them moral things besides the knowledge, and school is the first and the right place for them to meet people at their age and create social relations. Following are explanations to my view.
First of all, I believe that young adults at age sixteen or bellow are immature enough to stay away from the school. They are pretty vulnerable to be affected by distorted population. They are unable to distinguish between the right and the wrong. Therefore, it is very easy to attract them toward the dangerous road. Such as, taking or dealing with drugs or unhealthy sexual relations. For example, research published from Texas University about the percentage of Latino people who are drug dealers or using guns shows about 60% of them are kids under age 16. Most of them out of school.
Secondly, schools are the best institute for education. Since most of the families are very busy, work long hours per day carrying for their lives. They do not have that free time to teach their sons and daughters the right values such as respect others and being responsible for their work or being on time at school. For instance, my daughter's school creates a new way of teaching young kids via celebration the honor of the beautiful and responsible kids at the class. The school celebrates every month with five students from each grade in front of other ranks. Consequently, she starts to understand the value of being responsible and transfer these values inside our home.
Least but not the last, school is the only place that a person can meet others sharing them his/ her age, hobbies and being honest enough to tell them about his real feeling. For example, we all agree with that the friendship that built at school is the strongest and innocent one, nothing after that at the age of adulthood can be as it. So, if they deprived of the school at this age or bellow, they will never have their twin soul friends.
In conclusion, school is like a bright light in one's pursuits of knowledge. Children have to be at school at the age 16 and younger. They are not the adult yet; school teaches them morals besides experience and the only place to have the long real and strong friendships.
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to be the responsible for their children's lives.
to be the responsibilities for their children's lives.
to be responsible for their children's lives.
Since most of the families are very busy, work long hours per day carrying for their lives.
Since most of the families are very busy, work long hours per day are carrying for their lives.
So, if they deprived of the school at this age or bellow
So, if they are deprived of the school at this age or bellow
flaws:
More sentences varieties wanted. Try to use less pronouns (like 'It, I, They, We, You...') as the subject of a sentence.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 23 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 465 350
No. of Characters: 2124 1500
No. of Different Words: 230 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.644 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.568 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.338 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 134 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 84 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 60 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.6 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.516 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.56 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.268 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.451 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.11 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 480, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...y about the percentage of Latino people who are drug dealers or using guns shows about ...
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Line 5, column 49, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...usion, school is like a bright light in ones pursuits of knowledge. Children have to...
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Discourse Markers used:
['besides', 'but', 'consequently', 'first', 'if', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'therefore', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in conclusion', 'such as', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.247081712062 0.229887763892 107% => OK
Verbs: 0.13813229572 0.158761421928 87% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0972762645914 0.0866891130778 112% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0330739299611 0.046263068375 71% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0661478599222 0.0685040099705 97% => OK
Prepositions: 0.145914396887 0.118717715034 123% => OK
Participles: 0.0311284046693 0.0351676179071 89% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.41456060228 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0272373540856 0.0309702414327 88% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.091439688716 0.0887237588012 103% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00583657587549 0.0209618222197 28% => Some modal verbs wanted.
WH_determiners: 0.00389105058366 0.0139019557991 28% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2641.0 2387.08602151 111% => OK
No of words: 465.0 408.028673835 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.67956989247 5.86048508987 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.48200974243 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.301075268817 0.338922669872 89% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.189247311828 0.251872472559 75% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.14623655914 0.174417080927 84% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.094623655914 0.112833075102 84% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41456060228 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498924731183 0.524397521467 95% => OK
Word variations: 57.2727499508 59.2087087015 97% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6684587814 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.6 20.5533526081 90% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.3482852684 48.84282405 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.64 120.699889404 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6 20.5533526081 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.56 0.644075263715 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 37.5247311828 45.7405998639 82% => OK
Elegance: 1.7868852459 1.45489161554 123% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252038174445 0.300154397459 84% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0824004675692 0.103427244359 80% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0618272112894 0.0752933317313 82% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.466897291106 0.497263757937 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.160764095566 0.151897553556 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0897340628067 0.114077575197 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.053022577662 0.0781384742642 68% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.420882582546 0.336927656856 125% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0457251108607 0.067059652881 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173711068721 0.210909579961 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.026000010396 0.0618886996521 42% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8870967742 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.86379928315 129% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.91756272401 122% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 8.42114695341 95% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 13.6433691756 88% => OK
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30