Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Competition between friends usually negatively impacts friendships.
There is no doubt that the human is a socialized animals, everyone needs friends to
share their happiness and support when another falls into bad situation. I would say
say it is not easy to keep a relationship among friends. Some people believed that
nothing can destroy a friendship if people are good friends. Personally speaking, I
think that competition among friends can hurt the friendship.
To begin with, friends lose of trust on each other when they have to expose to
competition. when one is eager to be better than another, trust and sincerity do not
exist between them. For example, I experienced betrayal from one of my co-worker
when I worked as business analyst at consulting firm. Before we worked in the same place, we were good friends. since my manager announced us we have to work together and we will have an evaluation after this project. Naturally, everyone wants to get better performance and nobody wants to lose from the evaluation. As a result, she betrayed on me for achieving her goal, climbing to better position. From this experience, I often tell myself do not work with friends because I do not like to lose friendship with anybody again.
In addition, I believe that competition leads people to have more self-attention on their own. During the competition, people will refuse to share their things to benefit others. For instance, when I was in the senior high school, my classmates and I had tests frequently. since teacher started a evaluation of the students based on their score, we began to face each other. everyone have to fight with their friends to get good grade. In face, no one wants to share their knowledge to others, so the environment of the class got stressed and relationship of my classmate got worse.
In light of reasons mention above, I would deny the situation to face with my friends and classmate because i do not wants to lose my friend again and again. Therefore, I would highly recommend try to stay away from competition with friends.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in addition, no doubt, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1703.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 345.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93623188406 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71312089571 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.536231884058 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 512.1 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.7947387108 48.9658058833 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 85.15 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.25 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.75 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 11.0 4.53405017921 243% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128977131224 0.236089414692 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0408990793987 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0519856780986 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0538615600049 0.150856017488 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0454735927668 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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