In our lives, we have a lot of competition. For example, exams, college, employment, marriage etc. Competitors will change every time, but we can even compete with our friends. I think the competition between friends usually negatively impacts friendships. This is not only a problem to fight, but also you could lose friends. Therefore, I think there is no good competition in the world. I will tell you two reasons to support my opinion.
First, when we compete, we become sensitive. Therefore, we pay more attention to things than usual and stick to small things. Also, we can become selfish. It can break the friendship with a friend. For example, I had four close friends in 7th grade. The team was divided into two teams in a soccer game in P.E. with my friends. We could not control our emotions during the game and got into fights for small things. In the end, we made up with tears, but we should be careful about the competition between friends.
Second, in a really important competition, people become selfish. For example, the university that you and your friend want to go, in this case no matter how friendly your friend, you will become selfish and sensitive. Therefore, many students lose their friends in high school and the reason why the first and second grades are not close in Korea is because of competition.
I think it is really bad to compete with a friend. If it is really inevitable, it would be nice to accept the situation, control your emotions and also think that you help each other instead of competing with that friend.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, second, so, therefore, for example, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1298.0 1977.66487455 66% => OK
No of words: 272.0 407.700716846 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77205882353 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56566023798 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 212.727598566 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.544117647059 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 384.3 618.680645161 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.6604125689 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 64.9 100.406767564 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.6 20.6045352989 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.65 5.45110844103 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224006623347 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.073896491972 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0960016022312 0.0737576698707 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139139492541 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0362973051888 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.8 11.7677419355 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.2 58.1214874552 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 10.1575268817 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 9.79 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.37 8.01818996416 79% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 86.8835125448 41% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 4.5 10.002688172 45% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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