Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Educating young people about healthy food is important and should not be the job of families alone it should also be the responsibility of schools to teach their students about healthy eating | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Educating young people about healthy food is important and should not be the job of families alone it should also be the responsibility of schools to teach their students about healthy eating

From my perspective, in addition to the family education, it should also be the responsibility of schools to teach their students about healthy eating.

First of all, one reason lies in the schoolteachers' authority and their far-reaching influence on students. Young learners tend to trust their teachers and regard them as role models. Such complete trust means that schoolchildren may obey their teachers’ instructions. Therefore, if teachers teach them the importance of healthy eating habits, students will stand a better chance of sticking to them. My younger brother Jack can serve as a prime example. As a 7-year-old primary school student, Jack had a sweet tooth and his love for chocolate led to obesity. To improve his fitness levels, I kept warning Jack of the severe consequences of excessive sugar intake but my constant efforts failed. However, since his school placed a lot of emphasis on an organic diet, his teachers started to shape his behavior, helping him to resist the temptation of chocolate candies. Gradually influenced by this, Jack shifted his option from unhealthy foods to healthier ones. From this case, we can clearly see that schools have a more profound effect on students than family.

Some may argue that parents now have greater awareness of balanced diet and they can fulfill their role as caregivers well, so schools' main responsibility should focus on improving the academic performance of students. However, this is not always the case. A cruel fact is that some parents themselves may still underestimate the importance of a healthy diet. Even though they know such importance, busy parents may not have what it takes to educate their children well because they have to cope with heavy workloads and juggle multiple tasks. Even if they do squeeze in some time for their children, they are not professionally trained like dieticians. Parents' lack of knowledge and their bias about food may contribute to children’s bad eating habits. In this case, it is important for the school to take responsibility and correct students' misconceptions during their developmental stages. Usually, schools equipped with advanced technology can facilitate this process, especially with the help of teaching tools like slide shows and visually stimulating images.

In conclusion, it is crystal-clear that educating young people about healthy food should also be the responsibility of schools.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 38, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'schoolteachers'' or 'schoolteacher's'?
Suggestion: schoolteachers'; schoolteacher's
... First of all, one reason lies in the schoolteachers authority and their far-reaching influe...
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Line 9, column 10, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'argues'.
Suggestion: argues
...n students than family. Some may argue that parents now have greater awareness...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, well, in addition, in conclusion, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2057.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 383.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37075718016 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94050887615 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.592689295039 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 605.7 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.3896300975 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.85 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.15 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312981113807 0.236089414692 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0921461666187 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.123563539148 0.0737576698707 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.290343722918 0.150856017488 192% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.154643733879 0.0645574589148 240% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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