Do you agree or disagree with the following statement, the government should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympics teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Arts can develop a healthier society and make stronger culture; however, sports and athletes create healthier lifestyles and a happier society. So, both of them are really important, and none of them should be ignored by the government. There is an argument that the government should spend more money on arts and artists than in support of athletics. I completely disagree with this statement, and there is a lot of reasons for this, that two of them which have great importance elaborate hereunder.
First of all, sports are more amusing than the arts in public. Most people enjoy watching their favorite teams and enjoying watching the national athletes in international games such as the Olympics, and these games make them proud. For instance, during international football games, all of my country watch the games and forget their problems for a while and proud of the national team and support them. They always want the governments to support the team more to improve the team level.
Secondly, supporting athletes make the whole society, especially the young, active, which will improve the total health in the community. For example, nowadays, parents spend much more money and time on their kids when they are young to help them find their talent and become a great athlete. These young children observe society and the respect of athletes and make dreams to become a great athlete in the future and try hard. By spending money on these children and using the best training, society can warrant that they will have better athletes in the future. Also, the adults will tend to go to the gyms and train because they can motivate their children, and they will also want to follow the trend of being healthy in society.
So, society needs both great artists and athletes. Still, I believe it is not a good idea to support art more than sport because the sport is more amusing in pubic and makes society proud globally. Moreover, this investment makes people and especially children, more active and makes the public healthier.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, still, while, for example, for instance, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1694.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 343.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9387755102 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4055782086 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510204081633 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 513.9 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.4373927957 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.875 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4375 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.45110844103 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248783511254 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0899305349761 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0849933706787 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154461299699 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.04768811452 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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