The government plays a vital role in allocating national budgets to different sectors of society. Personally, I believe that the government should pay more money on athletics than artists. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, investing money in athletics helps encourages people to do more exercise, thereby enhancing the health of the whole society. To be more specific, sports athletes are positive role models for everyone in the community. As a result, their high awards in competitions will help expand their image to the public. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. My idol is a national football player who is an excellent striker. In order to play like him, I tried to practice a lot. In addition, I often play soccer with my friend every weekend. Accordingly, my health is improved significantly, and I met many friends who share the same interest as me.
Secondly, spending money on sports enhances the relationship between people in the country. Every time national teams participate in the Olympic, all of the people in the nation will work together to support the team regardless of the situation in the country at that time. For instance, when my national soccer team took part in the Olympics, people all over the country, regardless of age, gender, jobs, support the team together. At this time, everyone seems to be closer. We talk more and share more, not only about football but also about the country's development in terms of economics and cultural aspects. This is an opportunity that we can take advantage of to look back and forward in the future to find a way to help the country become a developed country.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that the government should invest more money in athletics than the arts. This is because sports can increase the health of people and enhance the connection of people in the country.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 147, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...ional teams participate in the Olympic, all of the people in the nation will work together...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, if, look, second, secondly, so, for instance, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1606.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 329.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88145896657 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72168720296 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.537993920973 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 506.7 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.5101094406 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.5263157895 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3157894737 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.26315789474 5.45110844103 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172974792168 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0506538086431 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0601855373671 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109113887693 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.024122196201 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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