Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
No one can deny the importance of various aspects for flourishing society. In this regard, people's opinions are divided as to whether governments should spend more attention to athletics activities or artistic parts of society. It is my firm belief that supporting athletics has more benefits for people and the state's governments than art. For a number of reasons and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
My primary reason is that people have more tendency toward sporty programs and athletics activities compare with artistic works. People prefer doing sport in their free time and consider these kinds of activity as a necessary part for increasing their living standards. Statistically, 70 percent of individuals around 14 to 30 years old age prefer selecting something about sport for their hobby time or as a professional skill. As a result, governments can prepare a suitable context for such activities and gain more money and budget than the costs of sporty projects.
Second, if the government spends more money in support of athletics such as state's Olympic teams, it will be more popular between people in society. Most people really like sport plans, and as you can see, football is one of the most popular sports in the world. If one government spend more budget for favorite sport activities in society, peoples give more attention and support toward government too. I have to admit that my opinion in this regard has been profoundly influenced by my own experience. I remember last two years ago our state's government was so popular and most people such as my nephews have a positive judgment about it because of their strong vision about sport and the important role of sport in our daily life. But, when the government drops the annual budget for state's football team, its popularity rises down and people don't prefer them again for later elective.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 121, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...is regard, peoples opinions are divided as to whether governments should spend more attention...
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Line 5, column 847, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...m, its popularity rises down and people dont prefer them again for later elective. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, really, second, so, as to, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1582.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 314.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03821656051 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62762593021 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.53821656051 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 486.9 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.7684425472 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.0 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4285714286 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220468482963 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0911043395409 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0992102237394 0.0737576698707 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160005392348 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.047500119576 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 121, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...is regard, peoples opinions are divided as to whether governments should spend more attention...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 847, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...m, its popularity rises down and people dont prefer them again for later elective. ...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, really, second, so, as to, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1582.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 314.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03821656051 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62762593021 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.53821656051 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 486.9 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.7684425472 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.0 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4285714286 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220468482963 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0911043395409 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0992102237394 0.0737576698707 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160005392348 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.047500119576 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.