Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In this day and age of financial crisis, budget constrain is one of the most prevailing problems of the governments across the globe, so they must choose between activities in terms of allocating money. In this vein, an overwhelming majority of population believe that government officials should set aside money for art. Meanwhile, the others holding different viewpoint state that the budget must be spent on athletics. I, personally, utterly agree with the former group for two substantial reasons, on which I will elaborate in the following essay.
To begin with, sponsoring sport teams is synonymous with cultivate the sense of belonging in people. To be more specific, in the past, there were many wars in the world, and nations in this way showed their power to the other ones and increased nationalism among people. Throughout history, that insatiable desire for showing off the power has not altered, and competing in the sport field become the new demonstration of old wars. In this regard, endorsed by the government, sport teams can achieve many medals in different competitions, so people can glorify their country making them more unify. On the other hand, supporting art is nothing but the waste of money because art has huge wealthy supporters. In this vein, if an artisan be a sophisticated one, the art fans fund him themselves, so there is no need for allocating tax-payers’ money to that.
Another noteworthy point is that endorsement of sports teams can lead people to be more physically active. To put it in a more vivid picture, nowadays, most, if not all, people are exposed to a sedentary lifestyle, which increases the risk of plenty of health problems, so they need physical exercise to mitigate this problem. Supporting sports teams can lead the athletes to become celebrities, which can have a significant impact on people's health due to the fact that people have an inherent zeal to imitate the well-known individuals. As a result, by spending money on sports teams, the government can indirectly inculcate exercising in members of the society. On the contrary, not all people have the same taste in art, so if the officials allocate money to the art, there always will be a part of the society that cannot make a connection the promoted art, so that individuals cannot exert the allocated dollars.
In conclusion, government must allocate money to the sports teams. This is because not only does that endorsement help people in life, but also sports can unify people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, well, while, in conclusion, as a result, on the contrary, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2094.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 416.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03365384615 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79163860785 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543269230769 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 649.8 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 14.0 4.94265232975 283% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.0475898088 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.176470588 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4705882353 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.41176470588 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163687033332 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.056868979807 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0421788665733 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.095208015602 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.033470575736 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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