cultural cnters
In this day and age of financial crisis, the budget is always less than the need of countries, so government must select the best options that augment the people's quality of life. In this spirit, one of the most controversial issues among the populace is allocating the money to the recreational centers or cultural centers. Although an overwhelming majority believes that officials must set aside money for recreational centers, others holding the opposite viewpoint argue that government must pay for museums and concerts halls. I, personally, utterly agree with the latter group for two substantial reasons, on which I will elaborate in the following essay.
To begin with, enhancing the museums and concert halls, the government sow the seeds of glory and nationalism. To be more specific, museums are all about the showing off the masterpieces of the past, which reveal the blossom of the cultural traits of one society. In this regard, acknowledging about the perfect past, the government can cultivate the sense of belonging in people, so they will do more activities to seize the greatness of the past days. Therefore, people will tend more to obey they social rules and cooperate more. Under such a circumstance, government creates a fertile ground for developing the country, which is one of the basic objectives of every community. On the other hand, recreational centers cannot cultivate any cultural emotion in people.
Another noteworthy point is that cultural centers can assist the government in making money. To put it in a more vivid picture, acquiring monumental museums and concert halls, a nation can attract tremendous amount of tourists gathering truckloads amount of money. Coming to enjoy exhibited art, the populace will spend money on commuting, buying souvenirs, hotels, to names but a few, which can guarantee a revolutionary well-rounded development in many societal aspects. Take Louvre museum for instance, of late, Forbes magazine report that cultural center has an impact on the 10 percent of the money that is spent in Paris, direct or indirect, showing the importance of cultural center in the economy of a country. By contrast, no tourist goes somewhere to use that country's recreational centers.
In conclusion, government must allocate money on museums or concert halls. This is because not only are tourist hotspots are financially lucrative, but also they can augment cultural situation of a country.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, therefore, well, for instance, in conclusion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 43.0788530466 37% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2061.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 390.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28461538462 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86350566514 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561538461538 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 639.0 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.0107254932 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.235294118 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9411764706 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.70588235294 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.114691725119 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0440831722234 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0606575607168 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0793268862601 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0258354076851 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.26 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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