Some people like to keep a record of their own experiences by uploading pictures and other information to social-networking sites. Other people prefer not to create such records.Which approach do you prefer, and why?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In this day and age of modernization, plenty of people use social media and allocate a big portion of their daytime on that. In this regard, an overwhelming majority of people believe they should not create records of their life on social media; meanwhile, others hold the opposite viewpoint. I, personally, utterly agree with the latter group for two main reasons, on which I will elaborate in the following essay.
To begin with, by uploading pictures and information to social media, people can achieve their objective in life.
To be more specific, social media set the stage for people to be connected with no limitation. In this vein, people can write comments under others' posts and express their feeling, which can inculcate the sense of confidence in the owner of the post. This feature is extremely advantageous when people get tired in their way of success, and they required a motivation to fuel their ambition. In this line of thought, imagine a student who studied for the TOEFL test and shared his efforts by posting them on Instagram. Someday, when he became disappointed of getting a brilliant mark, sorrowing, he opened Instagram and embarked on reading comments below his posts. Most of them were regarding how he speaks so native-like and a bunch of people want to be as fluent as him. This incident made him feel exhilarated and built up his confidence again aiding him to get back on track, and eventually, he got 111 out of 120 which is an excellent score. Had he not shared his experiences on Instagram, he would not have been able to pass the TOEFL test.
Another noteworthy point is that sharing experiences on social media would aid readers to a great extent in their life. Vividly, individuals have a limited time, so they need the precious treasury of others' experiences. Therefore, sharing what is happening to them, people can change others' life because they do not have to squander their invaluable time on gaining the same experiences. In this regard, social media provide people with a golden opportunity of connection, which can be used for sharing. For example, I can recall my first year as a student in Toronto. I had not ever been to Toronto, so everything was new to me made me scared because I am a totally introverted person and cannot ask others. One day, I found one of the senior students’ Facebook page, who shared all of his experiences about his first days as students in Toronto. That page was a life-saver because it assisted me to do not waste my time and reduce my stress in the process of adapting to a new city.
In conclusion, sharing experiences on social media is a helpful act. This is because not only can the owner of experiences be benefited from that, but also readers would use that them to do not squander their time.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, regarding, so, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, to begin with, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2309.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 485.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76082474227 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69283662038 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68602900829 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521649484536 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 729.0 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.7900637129 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 104.954545455 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0454545455 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.22727272727 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198316652321 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.063708812259 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0563630032897 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137364734635 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0413169178166 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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