Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Society is often divided on major issues involving government spending. One group believes that the governments should invest more on the art industry rather than the sport industry, while another group states that we should spend more budget on the sport industry. In my opinion, I believe there are stronger reasons for spending on the sport industry based on the two following reasons.
First of all, the sport competition can increase the national identity by gathering citizens' minds together. For example, during the 2016 Olympic games, the athlete Miss. Dai, who is one of the most talented badminton players from my country, defeated the players from India. Moreoever, I remembered that the crowds on the streets yelled out loud with joy by the victory of our nations. The next day, the great news of the badminton game was splashed across the headline of the newspapers. As a result, the atmosphere and identity in a country can be truly enhanced from the positive impact from national sport competitions.
Second, the encouragement of athletics can increase the interest of sport, and in turn enhance the health status of citizens. Take annual swimming activity in Sun Moon Lake, Taiwan as an example. The government in our country financially supports the annual activity, which attracts more that 10 thousand of people to swim together during that day. The citizens who successfully swim across the lake can get specific certifications, and the certifications can be viewed as a great honor and must-do event from the locals. To be more specific, the support from the government increases the willingness of doing sports. If more citizens exercise regularly, then their lifestyle would be much healthier than people without exercise.
In conclusion, although art can bring some positive feedback to the country in certain circumstances, such as the improvement of aesthetics. However, the benefits from supporting the sports industry can be far beyond the art industry, such as the community cohesion and the health benefits to the citizens. That are the reasons why I strongly disagree with the statement that the investment in art is more appropriate to the sport.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 184, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, so, then, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 43.0788530466 37% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1836.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 352.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21590909091 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80136109185 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.556818181818 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 550.8 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 10.0 3.08781362007 324% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.7497224432 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.0 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5555555556 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.77777777778 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214233126953 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0625317195742 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0636400747624 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128021814197 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0600222750701 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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