There is little justification for society to make extraordinary efforts especially at a great cost in money and jobs to save endangered animal or plant species Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statem

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There is little justification for society to make extraordinary efforts — especially at a great cost in money and jobs — to save endangered animal or plant species.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

The statement contends that the society should not make extraordinary efforts on endangered species, due to its great cost. However, I strongly disagree with the statement based on two reasons.

First of all, the environment directly impacts our daily life, and the consciousness of maintaining a permanent environment is crucial to human being's life. Endangered species in biology has direct impact to the way we life and the way we work. For example, the extinction of polar bears implies that the ice is melting due to global warming, and once the ice on the earth has all melted, then our land will be much smaller. Furthermore, the harbor we rely heavily for import and export would be damaged, the city on the coast may disappear, and people will eventually lost their job. The extinction of animals surely will lead to the impact of people's job and daily life. That is the reason why I disagree with the statement.

Second, saving the endangered animals and plants can be great profit instead of great cost. In other words, investment in animals and plants can be a budget investment for our better future. Instead of treating it as an extra ordinary effort, we should appreciate our government’s plan of environment saving. For instance, from a British research, the effort of maintaining national park in UK, costed more than 3% of the tax from citizens. However, the benefit gained from national park may be much higher than the expense it costed. A successful national park can not only beneficiate to merely wild animals or forest, but the job in national park can also create many job positions in the field of ticket administration, environment protection and accommodation. Thus, maintaining national park can bring revenue for citizens.

In conclusion, while human being is the king of all creatures, saving endangered animal or plant species not only save the environment for our future children, but also create profit for our citizens. From the reasons mentioned above, I strongly disagree with the statement.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 145, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'beings'' or 'being's'?
Suggestion: beings'; being's
...rmanent environment is crucial to human beings life. Endangered species in biology has...
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Line 4, column 570, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'lose'
Suggestion: lose
...y disappear, and people will eventually lost their job. The extinction of animals su...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, second, so, then, thus, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, first of all, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 33.0505617978 61% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 58.6224719101 63% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1710.0 2235.4752809 76% => OK
No of words: 336.0 442.535393258 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08928571429 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80389367271 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 215.323595506 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.520833333333 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 516.6 704.065955056 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.503136806 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.588235294 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7647058824 23.4991977007 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.82352941176 5.21951772744 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191320927276 0.243740707755 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0695278943341 0.0831039109588 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.060259326779 0.0758088955206 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137346660581 0.150359130593 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.046582768115 0.0667264976115 70% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 100.480337079 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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