Throughout history, sport and art have been the mainstay of every society, and thereby, the government is obliged to support each of them. Certainly, on that ground, some people contend that sports team deserves more financial help from the government. On the other side, there is a group of people who believe that art is an equally substantial part of the community and so it receives funds from the government. From my vantage point, the former view contains more weight. For the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most conspicuous reasons and examples justifying my stance.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that investing money in athletic games would help to improve the physical well-being of people in the country. To be more specific, in the last few decades, people’s lives become extremely sedentary due to busy life schedules. however, supporting athletic sports and winning medals for the country would encourage people to follow their favorite sports person’s daily health schedule. Drawing from my own country’s example to shed more light on what has been elaborated above. Last year, research was conducted at Rajiv Gandhi University on improvement occurred in the health of people in the last five years. The result was shocking because after winning the world cup three years back, people in my country, have started working out in the gym, and the graph has been raising constantly from that time. Therefore, evidently, it is reasonable to say that supporting sports events and games can improve the health of people.
The second rationale behind this opinion is rooted in the fact that athletic sports irrefutably invite many sports enthusiasts to take part in various athletic games who were not able to play sports due to lack of opportunities in their town. In fact, the government establishes various programs in the city area as well as countryside places so that everyone gets the chance to showcase their talents in athletic sports. To exemplify, in the recent athletic games, most of the medals were won by athletes who actually came from rural areas. Ultimately, it is merely to say that does the government not invest money in order to promote athletics, the country will gradually lose its sports heroes.
Finally, yet importantly, despite seeing the truth, many people support the idea of funding art. Nonetheless, this view is not entirely true. Indeed, traditional art has been always precious for each country since it represents the culture and ancient history of the country. Accordingly, it is widely funded by the government as well as non-organization firms in order to preserve it for the future generation. Thus, it is not a judicious decision to reserve extra funds for the art which has already been receiving a good portion of funding from the government.
All in all, by contemplating all remarks, although some people may not agree with my viewpoint, I strongly believe that the government should prioritize sports athletics over art. This is because it improves the overall health of people, and it gives chance to everyone to be a part of athletic games.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, actually, finally, first, however, if, may, nonetheless, second, so, therefore, thus, well, in fact, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2634.0 1977.66487455 133% => OK
No of words: 515.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1145631068 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.763781212 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71219530885 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 273.0 212.727598566 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530097087379 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 799.2 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.8470073325 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.52173913 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3913043478 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.39130434783 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166071956288 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.047949862898 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0381672874367 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0941441977857 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0234525327457 0.0645574589148 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 86.8835125448 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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