Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Distrubution of budget sometimes become controversial when conflicts emerge between two sections. Governments spend lots of money to preserve their cultural symbol and heritage of their country for future generations. Although there is lots of importance about supporting artists and art, I believe that governments should not exaggerate in that. I believe that there is other sections that need money to operate appropriately. One of them are sport teams and athletics which are representatives of the country. I have three reasons for my assert.
First, I think that maintaining sport will bring health to the society. According to the 21th century lifestyle of people and it's result, it is imperative to look for efficient and affordable programs that stop it's bad consequenses. One of the results that modern life brought for us is laziness and deficient of activity. Governments have a lots of construction programs to build gyms,stadiums and other facilities to make excercising affordable for every person in any caste of society. But these staretegies can reinforcement if some national athelets and national teams advertise excercising, not by TV, ofcourse by achieving medals and honor in international competes.As a result governments can balance their budgets in order to make some free spaces for this purpose.
Secondly, I beleive that atheletic charactristic of a country, especially these days that Olympics and other sport events has emerged, is not less than atristic entity of that region. Arts is defined as something that would represent a culture of people in any country. On the other hand sports has the same rules according to the sport events and media now. Government can spread and advertise their culture just by winning medals and cups in international sport competes. I remember when Germany won world cup all of the people of my country was talking about discipline and hardworking of germans.
All in All, to sum up, there is enough money for running all part of the society available for the governments, therefore there is no need to spend more money irrationally on a specific field. Govenments can balance their budgent to all sections fairly take the advantages of supports.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, i think, talking about, as a result, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1873.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 355.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27605633803 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01076558089 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.56338028169 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 582.3 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.3723292598 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.055555556 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7222222222 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.104741010865 0.236089414692 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0311043685388 0.076458572812 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0427284774913 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0661935064908 0.150856017488 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0497142087596 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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