Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Without a shadow of a doubt, governments should devote their budget to the subjects that can benefit societies and people. The point here is to choose the option that can offer more value to people. Although some persons think sportsmen and athletics need more support from the public sector in comparison to the artists, it is my firm conviction that spending the tax-based budget on the assistance of artists is more beneficial for our society. In what follows, I will elaborate on what rationale my perspective is based on.
The first and foremost reason is that artists need more money in order to keep on their works and build some masterpieces. It is an indisputable fact that it is difficult to make a living as an artist. On the one hand, rarely are people inclined to pay money for art. On the other hand, being a good and influential artist required them to take art as their single and full-time job. Therefore, they need to be under the help of the government to continue their profession as an artist. Take my cousin's experience as a compelling example. When he was a 21-year-old boy, he decided to be a painter. Aiming to be a real successful painter, he spent a huge amount of money to buy essential materials and equipment. At first, he was very talented painter who was praised by many people. However, after three years of striving to improve his skills and advertise his art works, he was not able to earn any considerable money. Had he been supported by the authorities, he would be able to continue thriving in his art.
The second pivotal vindicating reason is that the arts are part of our history and culture. Thus, there must be sufficient efforts to preserve them. If we cannot assist our artists, our arts will be diminished soon. As a result, there will be some externalities, and our culture might be affected. In this situation, neither people nor governments would be able to do anything effective for conserving our culture. Notably, today's arts are the products of a very long history that have passed many generations to reach us. Letting them be hurt will allow future generations to remember us as the killer of the long-standing precious assets. In this regard, we should undertake any effort we are capable of, such as supporting by money, to help them grow.
Furthermore, it is good to mention that many sports are already under the support of different private businesses. For instance, all of the soccer clubs are sponsered by big and famous private companies. With this in mind, they don not even need any grants from the public sector.
To put it in a nutshell, I believe that in the line of supporting the arts or athletics, the governments should choose the former. This is mostly due to the facts that artists are in need of more money to cover their costs, and we should also try to sustain our arts, and finally, most of the sportmen do not need any assistance from government.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 129, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, second, so, therefore, thus, for instance, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 15.1003584229 219% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 9.8082437276 214% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2416.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 514.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70038910506 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76146701107 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68188244557 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 263.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511673151751 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 751.5 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.7026381635 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.2857142857 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3571428571 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.64285714286 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168777709857 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0432253837586 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0476488952849 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100186884001 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0313660178666 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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