Some people like to keep a record of their own experiences by uploading pictures and other information to social-networking sites. Other people prefer not to create such records.Which approach do you prefer, and why?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The Internet, social media, and generally technology have overshadowed every aspect of people’s lives, creating a staggering change in people’s lifestyle and attitudes. Surprising as it may sound, it used to be considered as a taboo, sharing and uploading personal pictures through social media; however, nowadays people show great tendency to upload their pictures and other personal information in social networking sites. Contrary to many people who still do not prefer to have such virtual albums, I am totally in favor of sharing and posting personal pictures through the social media. The reasons, including but not limited to the following, substantiate my viewpoint.
To begin with, having a record of personal experience in social networking sites would create a permanent effect for the person because reviewing and taking a look at them can remind the person of the good and bad memories. In this line of thought, uploading personal pictures and sharing one’s own experience in social networking sites can guarantee that those pictures will not only remain safely, but also when a person take a glance at them, all those days would flash through their mind, reminding them of the memories he or she had. For instance, I used to be really active on Facebook and now on Instagram, most of the time I share my personal experience with my friends and followers. My page at these to social networking pages is like an album to me, because whenever I log in, I can easily go through my posts and picture remembering different occasions, happy or sad. A record of these experiences is really enjoyable for me because no matter when I get into these pages, as soon as I take a look at them, all those events and occasions would flash back, like my graduation party, the wedding ceremony, my mom’ funeral, and the day my nephew was born.
The next reason in line is that by having such kind of record in social media, other people would both enjoy and learn something new. In this vein, it can be noted that when people share their personal experience with other people, friends or strangers on social media, chances are high that other people would gain something out of those experience. What is more, there can be some memories or experiences that are happy moments not only for the person who shares them but also it can create joy and happiness for the people who watch them. For example, I travel to different cities within my country and also abroad; I also put a lot of time and energy sharing and posting my pictures and travel experience through my social pages. Having shared such kind of pictures, a lot of my friends and followers gave positive feedback telling me that they have learnt a lot about those places. Besides that, most of the time I share funny and happy moments of travel with my friends which makes them laugh.
To recap, taking the aforementioned reasons and examples into account, I believe that it is more preferential for me to share my experience through social networking websites. This is because not only will I leave create a permanent, more memorable album behind, but also other people who see the posts and pictures would both enjoy and gain experience.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, look, may, really, so, still, for example, for instance, kind of, to begin with, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 32.0 13.8261648746 231% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2661.0 1977.66487455 135% => OK
No of words: 548.0 407.700716846 134% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85583941606 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83832613839 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56634163921 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.452554744526 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 836.1 618.680645161 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.1344086022 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.2515242087 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 156.529411765 100.406767564 156% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.2352941176 20.6045352989 156% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.41176470588 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264960450202 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0971640639176 0.076458572812 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0678829944919 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181138664261 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0518778355112 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 11.7677419355 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.46 58.1214874552 82% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.5 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.0537634409 147% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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