Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.
Arts and sports are part of the essence of the human being. It is impossible to imagine a world without these two disciplines. There is no shortage of opinions about how governments should invest their money between these both. In my opinion, I do not agree that it should be spent more money in support of the arts than in athletics teams. I feel this way for two main reasons which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
First of all, sports generate competitions around the world. In the short and long term, the governments will find it more profitable to spend money on athletics teams, such as the Olympic ones, than doing the same for arts. For example, China is a very competitive country in all Olympic games. They reach the podium in the vast majority of the events. This is positive for the visibility of the country's athletes, also for the different companies that support and sponsor them. Although China is not the only good example of this, its development as an economy is a reason to believe that they are doing things right in terms of the division of capital resources. It is clear to see why I do not believe that it should be spent more money on arts than sports.
Secondly, in some countries, the low investment from the government to the Olympic teams is already generating problems, not only economically, but socially. Groups of talented and enthusiastic sportsmen and sportswomen are getting frustrated because they cannot reach their dreams due to the lack of economic sources. This affects the picture of the country to the eyes of the world. My personal experience living in a country that has this problem matches perfectly with this. Mexico is well-known as a place where people enjoy very much practicing sports. However, it is not a secret that we face everyday corruption and bad governments that do not administrate the vast capital generated by Mexicans. In the last years, the budget focused on Olympic teams has been decreasing dramatically. As a result, Mexico has had negative results that do not correspond with the talent and discipline of the athletes who go to the competitions. Therefore, spending more money in favor of the arts will carry more serious problems for our people in the sports world. For this reason, I do not support the idea that governments should spend inequitably its money between arts and sports.
In conclusion, I strongly disagree with the idea that it should be spent more money in support of the arts than on athletics teams. This is because in the short and long term governments will found more profitable to spend money on athletics teams, and low investments from the government to the Olympic teams are already generating problems, not only economically, but social.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, i feel, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2290.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 470.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87234042553 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70788797977 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.463829787234 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 697.5 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.7774659509 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.4166666667 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5833333333 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.70833333333 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.397090249351 0.236089414692 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103022388099 0.076458572812 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114536264515 0.0737576698707 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.271520787696 0.150856017488 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0544373026928 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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