Sports and social activities are just important as classes and library should receive equal financial support. Agree or Disagree?
No one can deny that there are both positive and negative aspects of financially supporting equally sports and social activities as classes and library. personally, I am definitely agree with the statement. it is my firm belief that the areas mentioned should have a balance in monetary terms for a number of reasons, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, people must be able to thrive themselves in any activity they require. If there is a financial equality among these different fields, more persons will be involve in laboral as well as entertainment instances. it is well-known that sports, social and academic stuff are fundamental for the correct development of a city. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own experienced. you see, I live in a town which is very difficult to get access to financial support when it comes to an academical task. I remember when I was taking elementary school, I regularly participated in contests such as maths, grammar, and so on. In case of winning, it was required to leave the town to compete in the next round, facing other schools. Most of the time I could not attend those competitions due to they did not have resourses. On the contrary, students from sports classes never missed one tourney. Great for them, but to be honest I saw this situation as unfair for me and others. For this reason I think it must be a equally support for sports and social activities and classes.
Secondly, all this activities are essential for humans to live with an equilibrium and good physical and mental health. where there is a lack of some of them, there will be a problem. it is necessary for the entire population to practice a sport, to have social life, and to find a place to learn and adquire abilities to face the hardness of life. Drawing for my own experience, my mother's city represents what happens when you can not access to all these facilities properly. she says that when she was a child, it was very difficult for kids to practice an sport in any place of the city. The reason was simply that they did not have spaces to do this. Moreover, the autorities never allowed them to be in the streets, regarding the high rate of violence in the conurbations. As a consequence, a lot of children grew up with obesity problems. this example demonstrate how important is to find an equilibrium between an equal financial support.
In conclusion, I do believe that is critically important to finance classes and library with the same proportion as sports and social activities. this is because population have the right to live their life where they wish and in a equilibrated way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, well, i think, in conclusion, such as, as well as, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2244.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 474.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73417721519 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66599839874 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78476217834 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525316455696 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 720.9 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.1965126256 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.76 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.96 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.32 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.5376344086 271% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222756698516 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0581262202896 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.081098576244 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158571842876 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0539701045172 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.