Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teachers should be paid according to how much their students learn. Give specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Teachers are fundamental for society's progress. No one can deny that there are both positive and negative aspects of teachers being paid according to the student’s performance. If I were forced to choose, I would definitely disagree about it for a number of reasons, which I will explore in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, education is not a competition. If the salary of the teachers were according to how much students learn, that could create a competitive environment between professors. Everyone would like to be at the top, even though this means committing cheating in the evaluation processes. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my personal experience. You see, when I was in high school, we were evaluated by the government with a very long and tough exam. Not only we as students were concerned about this, the academic staff too. This is because our school will be graded, as same as the teachers of each subject. As a result, evaluators could award my school with financial support, and specific benefits for professors and directors. Embarrassingly, the teachers decided to help some students during the test, altering the real results, so, my school received the recognition that year. Moreover, in order not to lose that level, they continue this behavior the following years. For this reason, I disagree with the idea of giving salaries to teachers according to how much students show they learned in a classroom.
Secondly, it is unlikely to have the same initial conditions for every teacher. There are no identical groups of students. We must be aware of the external factors that make this strategy unfair for teachers. In a classroom, there may be people with learning disabilities or family problems, and in the next one, everyone can be free of these mentioned problems. Drawing from my own experience, I used to discuss a lot about this matter with a close friend. We were in different colleges, but at some point, we took the same math course with the same topics to visit. Our results were significantly lower than his group. He stated that the real reason may be that his instructor was better than mine. I refused the statement because I believed that the truth behind those results was more complicated. For instance, that course is a continuation of another, this means that to accurately understand everything, we needed to be taught in previous topics. Unfortunately, this was not the case. Our professor of that subject missed a month of classes because of health problems. Because of the lack of classes, we struggled a lot later. This example demonstrates why depends on a classroom performance is not a good election to establish a professor’s salary.
In light of the above-mentioned reasons, I strongly believe that teacher’s salary should not depend on how much a student learns. This is because that could become an unnecessary and risky competition environment, also all the groups of students are different.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, for instance, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 15.1003584229 192% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2521.0 1977.66487455 127% => OK
No of words: 501.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03193612774 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73107062784 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92281549655 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 273.0 212.727598566 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544910179641 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 779.4 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 26.0 9.59856630824 271% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.6538437823 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.0333333333 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.06666666667 5.45110844103 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 3.85842293907 337% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255481794882 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0591879446177 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0700446967712 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151772283484 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0610388315411 0.0645574589148 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 131.0 86.8835125448 151% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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