Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teachers should be paid according to how much their students learn. Give specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Teachers are the building blocks of an institution. They perform a very paramount task of educating the people. Student’s learning is based on myriad of factors. Some may say that teacher’s salary should be based on student’s learning. However, I do not believe this way for the reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, teachers alone cannot make the students learn the concepts. Every student attends the same class but the amount of self-study they do accounts for the difference in learning the concepts. For instance, when I was at university, I used to devote a lot of time studying at home and focused on the concepts which were unclear to me. As a result, I got good grades. Students who only relied on the teacher blamed her if they were not able to grasp the things taught at class. This led to teachers getting paid low despite their hard work.
Furthermore, teachers should be paid according to their capabilities. If a teacher instructs in an efficient way, she should be paid more. Take the case of my school. Principal used to inspect classes and judge the teachers based on their teaching methods. In addition, the students were also asked for the feedback of the teacher. In this way, teachers could not be held responsible if a student could not understand the theory. As a result, the teacher received salary in proportion to her efforts irrespective of the students’ grade.
To sum up, teacher’s pay should solely depend upon their task and not the student’s efforts because students also have a part in process of learning and teachers should be judged upon their effectiveness of teaching.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: tasks
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Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'saith', 'says'.
Suggestion: saith; says
...is based on myriad of factors. Some may say that teacher’s salary should be based o...
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Message: Consider replacing "in an efficient way" with adverb for "efficient"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ir capabilities. If a teacher instructs in an efficient way, she should be paid more. Take the case...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, for instance, in addition, as a result, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1377.0 1977.66487455 70% => OK
No of words: 281.0 407.700716846 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90035587189 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74079579708 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 212.727598566 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551601423488 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 404.1 618.680645161 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.9979707052 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.4736842105 100.406767564 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.7894736842 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.78947368421 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29602339705 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0942934740576 0.076458572812 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.074526622215 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192280664382 0.150856017488 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0355784604185 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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