Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teachers should be paid according to how much their students learn. Give specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Education is one of the most significant for a country to improve, which means that teacher’s quality is also an important issue. If teachers’ salary is depend on their effort and the teaching result, the students will procure plenty of benefit, in turn ameliorates the country. Therefore, in my perspective, teachers’ pay should base on how much students learn.
First and foremost, teachers who spend a bunch of time to horn their teaching skill and prepare for the class material should be paid more base on the concept of fair, which means that the salary should represent the production of a person instead of their position. For example, a teacher who prepare the slide and practice the presentation before next day’s class will always convey the knowledge much more effective than those who just browse the text book for ten minutes. Provided that they both earn the same money, it is obvious that the hour payment is vary, which is definitively disobey the rule of fairy. Furthermore, the hard working teachers’ students will be much greater than other due to teaching resources.
In addition, higher pay for those teachers who is willing to dedicate themself into education will provide them motivation, which will also attract more teachers to work harder. This can make the number of great teacher increase, which in turn also boost the students’ performance. For instance, paying hard working teachers twice as much as the payment for those whose students perform poor due to their teachers’ insufficiency of teaching skill will make great teachers have better life and spend even more time to delve into the education, such as studying the related book or asking other eminent teachers about the teaching method, and will make those poor teachers leave this industry due to the adverse situation caused by low salary. This eventually will make school remain the best teachers and students will also secure best education.
To sum up, paying more to those hard working teachers who always transmit the information articulately in turn improving students’ performance is fair because their working load is higher. Besides, this attractive salary will also give teachers the motivation to improve their skill and let poor teachers give up. It is evident that paying teacher base on their students’ performance have more merits.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, furthermore, if, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in addition, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1984.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 382.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19371727749 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60650573616 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.497382198953 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 586.8 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 95.5259340788 48.9658058833 195% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.714285714 100.406767564 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2857142857 20.6045352989 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.45110844103 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181511996229 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0858004537493 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0575788133259 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137937196285 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.028383770467 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 11.7677419355 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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