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When a new technological device becomes available some people buy it right away others wait until many have adopted it Which view do you agree with

Nowadays, due to the cutting-edge development of technology, the newest electronic product always contain the most powerful functions which can make people employ it to handle many arduous tasks. Nonetheless some people may argue that newest devices may contain some drawbacks which have not been discover yet. In my perspective, purchasing the digital product opportunely have plenty of benefits.

First and foremost, people can enjoy the high quality given by the original product’s function. They can also utilize it to improve their work efficiency. For example, the newest version of iPhone have the function of high resolution camera and high quality communication system. Its gorgeous capacity can also let people to generate marvelous result. People can introduce its camera to take many unexpected video and upload it on Youtube, which can make them earn the money. Therefore, the product will become the working tool instead of just for the entertainment.

In addition, all of those functions can replace other outdated devices, which means that possesses one device can save the money by reducing the spending on several other poor devices. For instance, the newest computer can directly used to run the advance software which require the old computers to add other external devices such as hard disk. Maybe the gross of the cost about those two product have already transcend the price of that new computer. Nonetheless, the quality of its functions are much better, which means that people who buy the electronic device opportunely can procure best quality and lower price.

To sum up, people who purchase the new technology device can use it to accomplish their work and earn money from it. Furthermore, people will actually save much money by the virtue of curtailing the spending on other poor product and. It is evident that buying the original digital product have more merits.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 197, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Nonetheless,
...employ it to handle many arduous tasks. Nonetheless some people may argue that newest devic...
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Line 1, column 298, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'discovered'.
Suggestion: discovered
...tain some drawbacks which have not been discover yet. In my perspective, purchasing the ...
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Line 5, column 412, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'transcended'.
Suggestion: transcended
...st about those two product have already transcend the price of that new computer. Nonethe...
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Line 5, column 583, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'procure the best'.
Suggestion: procure the best
...y the electronic device opportunely can procure best quality and lower price. To sum up, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, furthermore, may, nonetheless, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in addition, such as, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 15.1003584229 20% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 52.1666666667 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1602.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 305.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25245901639 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59832704121 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.55737704918 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 506.7 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.3286930084 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.125 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0625 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.9375 5.45110844103 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191042466139 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0658925959335 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.03896929599 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128979176288 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0318704901351 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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