Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state sponsored Olympic teams

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?. Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams

Recently there is a heated debate on the budget for arts and athletics. arts let people embrace the world of a wonderland by admiring all the beauty. athletics shows the strength of the human body. Personally, I think the government should invest more in the arts.

First of all, it’s crucial for the overall health of citizens. Admittedly, physical health is disturbing when we talk about obesity and cancers, and we are truly afraid of these diseases. but nowadays the mental well-being of nationals has been a more severe concern across the country because the pressure of earning a living, pursuing advanced studying, or socializing is threatening to cause people to burn out. And there are few places serving as relaxing resorts for common people. Therefore, if the government allocates more money to arts, such as building new art museums or just making the street walls more artful, I believe it will place citizens as the beneficiaries. For example, when a teacher finishes a long day of teaching and feels exhausted, then she or he chooses to visit an art museum, all the paintings or statues are going to make her or his pain and pressure go away really quickly.

In addition, arts are overlooked seriously. As many are aware that we often overlook and ignore arts in daily life. this is the result of overemphasizing utility from the individuals to the government. In viewing this situation, the government should be generous in money to incorporate arts into school education and festivals. if there are loads of arts festivals in cities, it’s no doubt that the awareness of arts is bound to be aroused.

In conclusion, I am of the opinion that the government should spend more money on arts rather than athletics. The critical role of arts should never be ignored.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, really, so, then, therefore, well, for example, i think, in addition, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 43.0788530466 44% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1489.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 302.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93046357616 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74005972269 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.605960264901 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 461.7 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 57.3307649434 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.5882352941 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7647058824 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.11764705882 5.45110844103 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196340422863 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.063567490008 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.068684801725 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140881856177 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0640218117971 0.0645574589148 99% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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