There are different opinions on whether the government should invest in arts and artistic activities or sports and athletic activities. Even though some people think that art has been overlooked during recent years and must receive financial aid from the government, I believe otherwise, maintaining that the government should invest its money in more efficacious and beneficial grounds such as sports. In what follows, I will delve into the most persuasive reasons to substantiate my perspective.
Without a doubt, the most consequential reason corroborating my stance on this subject is if the government pours a tremendous amount of money into athletic activities, better athletic facilities will be built, which encourages people to utilize these facilities and increase the public tendency toward doing sport and exercise. Playing sports provides people with numerous advantages, for instance, it teaches them teamwork, strategies, and reaching goals. In addition, doing exercise regularly results in an increment in public health. According to a recent survey, people's average life expectancy in North Europe is ten years above the rest of the world's since most people in this region put sports and exercise in their daily schedule. Therefore, this reason manifests that the government should invest significantly in sports since the more money the government spends on sports, the healthier people become.
Although the previous reason is the first one crossing the mind at first glance, another remarkable point deserving some words here is that today, sport and athletic activities are not just a thing that people conduct for fun or to keep their mental and physical health in good condition. Nowadays, sport is an industry that can produce any government innumerable income. Take FIFA World Cup as an example. The government that undertakes to host this event must spend a lot of money to construct new amenities, such as new stadiums, hotels, restaurants, and so on, to become able to host millions of people who would travel to their country during this event. On the other hand, the government would be paid off as soon as a myriad of people come to the country to support their national team. Therefore, they spend a lot of money in the host country and provide the host country's government with millions of dollars in income. Thus, this point illustrates the fact that sport is the right place to invest since the invested money with extra profits will be paid off in the short term.
All in all, many people are in favor of funding art and artistic stuff. Nevertheless, the foregoing reasons lead us to conclude that there is no place better than sports for a government to invest in since it not only improves public health but also brings the government countless income.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, for instance, in addition, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2346.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 454.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16740088106 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7005375438 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533039647577 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 702.9 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 81.6804898501 48.9658058833 167% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.0 100.406767564 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7058823529 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.82352941176 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181011394676 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0585937077014 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0445550865109 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111409174708 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0222618025646 0.0645574589148 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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