Nowadays, the extensive use of both portable and unportable electronic devices, not only just by youngster but also by adults, such as smartphones, tablets, laptops, and so on, is evident. There are different opinions on the adverse impacts that usage of these devices might have on young people. Some people hold the idea that overuse of these devices by children and youngsters adversely affects their ability to build relationships with people in real world. However, others, with whom I comply, believe that not only does utilization of these devices by young people provide them with sharp increase in their interpersonal and social skills, but it also helps those who does not have the prerequisites of cultivating and maintaining a proper social relationships, be able to do so. In what follows, I will delineate my viewpoint on the ground of two persuasive reasons.
Without a doubt, the most consequential point corroborating my stance on this subject is internet and electronic devices has breached the limitation of countries' frontiers. Today, peoples, no matter where they live, can contact with each other thanks to internet, social media, and related applications such as Instagram, Skype, Zoom, and so forth. People, particularly young ones, are now able to talk or chat with people living in different countries with different culture and social behavior. People improve their social skills by talking to other people from disparate nations and implement what they have learned from their abroad friends in their real-life relationships. The more youngsters talk to peoples holding not similar social or cultural criteria as they do, the more they are likely to increase their social ability. There was a survey conducted on this subject by the researchers at MIT, last year. The result of the research showed that young people who are inclined to spend a considerable time in social media or dating and texting applications are more social than who are not.
Although the previous point is the first one crossing the mind at first glance, another remarkable reason deserving some words here is that many young people do not hold social skill inherently. They do not feel comfortable in public places, and prefer to stay at home and be away from other people. Electronic devices and social media are dramatically helpful to these people. They can find friends in social media, talk to them, and share their workaday stuff with them. Accordingly, after a while, they are likely to become more social, and they may feel even more convenient in public places. If not for the technology and electronic devices, these young people might never find the chance to increase their social skill.
To make the long story short, and reflecting upon all the aforementioned grounds, one soon realizes that electronic devices are better to be considered as machine propels youth toward cultivating promising and long-lasting social relationships rather than as an impediment that stunt the growth of social ability in youngsters.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 754, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'relationship'?
Suggestion: relationship
...ivating and maintaining a proper social relationships, be able to do so. In what follows, I w...
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Line 3, column 708, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'people'.
Suggestion: people
...ationships. The more youngsters talk to peoples holding not similar social or cultural ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, however, if, may, so, while, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 14.8657303371 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 58.6224719101 107% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2551.0 2235.4752809 114% => OK
No of words: 489.0 442.535393258 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21676891616 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70248278971 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75069445418 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 215.323595506 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527607361963 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 782.1 704.065955056 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.77640449438 450% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.3868335484 60.3974514979 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.263157895 118.986275619 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7368421053 23.4991977007 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.52631578947 5.21951772744 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256124668861 0.243740707755 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0813743742522 0.0831039109588 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.053602444654 0.0758088955206 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161474301655 0.150359130593 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.025476758608 0.0667264976115 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 14.1392134831 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.1639044944 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 100.480337079 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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