Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Governments' allocation of budgets have long been a cotrovercial issue. Whereas some may suggest that the field of art is more wealth spending money on than that of sport, I firmly believe that it is more wise for governments to allocate more money to support athletics. I consider this way based on several reasons which I will explore in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, comparing with art, there are more global sport events to enhance the visibility of a country on the international stage. That is to say, if a local authority invests enough money in support of athletics, they would have lots of opportunities to increase the popularity of their country by winning in massive international sports compitions. For example, an athletic from a small country in Africa, which only a few people recognize, won the gold medal in 2016 Olympic event. After then, that country gain enormous attention owing to the wide reports from media and the spread of that athletic's story on social platform. The story tells that athletic born in a poor family. If the government of her country had not gave finacial support to her, she would not have won the champion in Olympic, not to say obtaining global's recognition of her country.
On top of that, spending money in sporting field encourages citizens to participate in exercising. In this way, the health level of a country could be drastically improved since more and more people cultivate the habit of training themselves. Nowadays due to the dusy life style and the development of artificial and unhealthy food, human are more likely to suffer from diseases, such as obesity and heart attack. Fortunately, these diseases can be eliminated and avoided by conducting regular exercise. Therefore, it is crucial for governments to allocate great amount of money in support of sport, so that citizens will have motivation to exercise.
To sum up. I disagree with the idea that government should spend more money to support art than athletics. This is because investing in sports fields brings more benefits to a country, including more opportunities to gain global popularity on international events, and health level improvement of citizens.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 731, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'given'.
Suggestion: given
...f the government of her country had not gave finacial support to her, she would not ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, so, then, therefore, whereas, for example, such as, to begin with, to sum up, on top of that, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1840.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 361.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09695290859 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85258041615 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.554016620499 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 584.1 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.6384150702 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.235294118 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2352941176 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.88235294118 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257620717317 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0824933042168 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10697365607 0.0737576698707 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175079731614 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.052827830635 0.0645574589148 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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